Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct tense and clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “My favourite food is…”), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and word order (e.g., “a Filipino dish called rice noodles”); avoid filler and sentence fragments. Aim for 3–4 well-formed sentences.

예시: My favourite food is a Filipino dish called rice noodles. It is usually tossed in soy-based sauce and often includes a mix of seafood or meats. Because it is savory and filling, I enjoy it for family meals and special occasions.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about past preference, then contrast with present preference using linking words (e.g., “but”/“however”). Use correct tense and concise phrasing, avoid repetition. Provide one specific example and a reason for the change.

예시: When I was young, I loved sweet foods such as ice cream and cake. However, as I grew older I realised they are unhealthy if eaten often, so now I prefer meals rich in carbohydrates and protein for better nutrition.

제안: Directly answer the seasonal question, then give 1–2 specific examples of how your diet changes by season or occasion. Use clear linking (e.g., “in summer,” “in winter,” “when I moved to Canada”) and correct collocations (e.g., “different kinds of dishes,” “I’m not picky”). Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. In summer I eat lighter dishes like fresh salads and fruits, while in winter I prefer warm, hearty soups and rice dishes. Since moving to Canada, I have also enjoyed local cuisine such as roasted vegetables and stews.

제안: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence, then explain how and why your preferences changed with specific details and linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”). Use correct tense consistency and avoid unfinished sentences. Mention specific foods you prefer now and a brief reason.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I mainly ate sweets, but as I grew older I changed my habits because I wanted to be healthier. Now I prefer meals high in protein and complex carbohydrates, such as grilled chicken with brown rice, because they support my energy and wellbeing.

× I have a favorite lifetime favorite food.

✓ I have a lifetime favorite food.

Redundant wording: 'favorite' repeated. Simplify to 'a lifetime favorite food' for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× It was a Filipino cuisine.

✓ It was a Filipino dish.

'Cuisine' refers to a style of cooking and is uncountable or collective; when referring to a specific prepared item, use 'dish'.

× It was called the rice noodles.

✓ It was called rice noodles.

When naming a food in general, omit the definite article 'the'; use the plural 'rice noodles' without 'the'.

× It was mixed with separate sauce like soy sauce and you can also put some combination of seafoods as well as different meat products and it was also.

✓ It was mixed with various sauces such as soy sauce, and you could also add a combination of seafood and different kinds of meat.

Use correct prepositions and nouns: 'mixed with various sauces' not 'separate sauce'; 'such as' is more natural than 'like' in this listing; 'seafoods' is incorrect—use 'seafood' or 'types of seafood'; 'different kinds of meat' is clearer.

× Enjoyable and full to the stomach if.

✓ It was enjoyable and very filling.

Fragmented sentence and awkward phrasing. Combine into a complete sentence with appropriate adjective and idiom: 'filling' instead of 'full to the stomach' and remove stray 'if'.

× I would really remember when I was in my younger years I used to like sweets food like ice cream and cake but when I realized growing up those food is not a healthy food for me.

✓ I remember that when I was younger I used to like sweet foods like ice cream and cake, but as I grew up I realized those foods are not healthy for me.

Tense and agreement issues: use simple past 'remember' or present 'I remember that when I was younger'; 'sweets food' incorrect—use 'sweet foods'; subject-verb agreement 'those foods are' not 'is'.

× If you ate it every day, eat moderately is a good option, but I like carbohydrates and protein the most when I'm mature.

✓ If you eat them every day, eating them in moderation is a good option, but I prefer carbohydrates and protein now that I am older.

Conditional and verb form corrections: use present conditional 'If you eat them'; 'eat moderately' should be a gerund phrase 'eating them in moderation'; 'when I'm mature' is unnatural—use 'now that I am older' or 'as an adult'.

× I normally eat different kind of dishes because I'm not picky in terms of food but particularly I ate different meaning with different cuisine, especially Asian foods and when I came here in Canada it it tastes also different kinds of dishes like picking and it is one also my favorite until now.

✓ I normally eat different kinds of dishes because I'm not picky, especially various Asian cuisines. When I came to Canada, the dishes tasted different, but I still enjoy many of them and they remain some of my favorites.

Plural agreement 'different kinds'; awkward phrasing 'ate different meaning' replaced with 'various Asian cuisines'; 'it it tastes' fixed; 'different kinds of dishes like picking' unclear—rewritten for clarity and correct quantifiers.

× When I was a child I used to eat sweet foods but when I'm getting older I I change my eating habits.

✓ When I was a child I used to eat sweet foods, but as I got older I changed my eating habits.

Tense consistency: 'used to' with past context, so shift 'I'm getting older' to past 'as I got older' and 'I change' to past 'I changed'.

× Now I'm already a 35 year old woman.

✓ Now I am a 35-year-old woman.

Hyphenation for compound age adjective and remove unnecessary 'already' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer to eat healthy foods like high protein and carbohydrates that is also good for my physical well-being and I only.

✓ I prefer to eat healthy foods that are high in protein and carbohydrates because they are good for my physical well-being.

Article and agreement fixes: 'high protein and carbohydrates' should be 'high in protein and carbohydrates'; subject-verb agreement 'that are' not 'that is'; sentence fragment 'and I only' removed and integrated into a complete sentence.