Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите повторы и заполнители («uh») и сделайте ответ более естественным. Начните с основной мысли, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали; используйте связки (for example, because) для логичности. Также замените общие прилагательные более точными (например, historic, striking).

예시: Yes. I often photograph buildings when I travel because I enjoy capturing architectural details. For example, if a façade has intricate carvings or bold colours, I take several shots to remember it.

제안: Устраните повторы и исправьте структуру предложения; начните с ясного ответа и добавьте конкретную причину. Уточните детали (например, which level, what you expect to see) и используйте связки (because, so) для связности. Также корректнее говорить "the Eiffel Tower" и избегать лишних слов.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the Eiffel Tower again because I went to Paris in 2019 but didn’t go up to the top level. I want to go to the summit to enjoy the panoramic view of the city and take photos.

× Yes, I usually take photos of buildings, especially when I travel in a new city or town and, uh, I explore new places and, uh, if I find this building interesting, uh, and beautiful and elegant, I take a photo of it.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of buildings, especially when I travel to a new city or town; I explore new places, and if I find a building interesting, beautiful, or elegant, I take a photo of it.

The sentence contains incorrect or redundant use of articles and noun phrases and awkward conjunctions rather than a present participle error; also 'travel in a new city' should be 'travel to a new city'. Use parallel structure for adjectives and reduce filler words. Suggestion: replace 'travel in' with 'travel to', remove repeated 'uh' and redundant 'this', and use commas and conjunctions to join ideas clearly.

× Yes, I want to visit again Eiffel Tower because I've been to Paris in 2019 and I've already been to Eiffel Tower, but I wasn't on the highest point of this monument, so I would like to reach it.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the Eiffel Tower again because I went to Paris in 2019 and I have already been to the Eiffel Tower, but I did not go to the highest point of the monument, so I would like to reach it this time.

Mixing 'I've been to Paris in 2019' with a specific past time is incorrect; use simple past 'went' with a specific year. Also article 'the' is needed before 'Eiffel Tower'. 'Wasn't on the highest point' is awkward; use 'did not go to the highest point'. Suggestion: use simple past for a completed action at a definite time, include definite article for named monuments, and replace informal 'reach it' with 'go to the highest point' or 'reach the top' for clarity.