Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but has many grammar and clarity issues. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and start with a clear topic sentence. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I'm not interested in photographing buildings; I prefer nature") and organize supporting details with linking words (e.g., "However," "But"). Be specific: mention what aspects of nature you photograph and briefly explain why. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "take water for building" and "his professional actually."

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings; I prefer photographing nature, especially landscapes and plants. However, my brother enjoys architectural photography and often posts building photos on his account, which I admire. Sometimes I try architectural shots inspired by him, but nature photography is my main interest because I enjoy capturing colours and textures.

제안: Your answer needs a clear topic sentence naming a specific building and concise supporting details. Avoid hesitations and repetition. If you can't recall the name, describe the building and explain why you want to visit using linking words (e.g., "for example," "because"). Provide one or two specific reasons (e.g., exhibits, architecture, history).

예시: To be honest, I would like to visit the local history museum in my city because it has beautiful architecture and interesting exhibits about our region. For example, it displays traditional costumes and old photographs, which would help me learn more about our culture.

× Actually I'm not interested in building building I interesting on taking photos for nature more than a building.

✓ Actually I'm not interested in photographing buildings; I'm more interested in taking photos of nature than of buildings.

The original sentence has multiple preposition and word-choice errors: 'interested in building building' is incorrect and repetitive; use 'interested in photographing buildings' or 'interested in photos of buildings'. 'interesting on taking photos' should be 'interested in taking photos' (correct verb + preposition collocation). Also use 'photos of nature' and the comparative 'more than of buildings' to show contrast. Suggestion: use correct collocations with 'interested in' and 'photos of/photographing'.

× But I see my brother account and he like and observe obsessed to take water for building and I like it actually his professional actually.

✓ But I saw my brother's account, and he likes and seems obsessed with photographing buildings; I actually like it because it looks professional.

Problems include wrong verb tense and forms ('see' -> 'saw' if referring to past viewing), missing apostrophe in 'brother's account', wrong verb agreement ('he like' -> 'he likes'), incorrect verb 'observe obsessed' (should be 'seems obsessed' or 'is obsessed'), wrong preposition 'to take water for building' which is unclear — likely 'photographing buildings'. 'I like it actually his professional actually' is ungrammatical; clarify as 'I actually like it because it looks professional'. Suggestions: use correct possessive form, subject-verb agreement, appropriate verbs ('seems obsessed', 'photographing'), and clear clause linking (use 'because').

× To be honest, I'm interested in museum, such a museum that I know, for example, uh, here when a man, we have, uh, museum, but I don't know the name, but it's beautiful and it's beautiful and.

✓ To be honest, I'm interested in museums, such as the museum I know here; for example, we have a museum nearby, but I don't know its name, and it's very beautiful.

Errors: 'interested in museum' needs plural or article ('interested in museums' or 'interested in the museum'). 'such a museum that I know' should be 'such as the museum I know'. The phrase 'here when a man, we have, uh, museum' is unclear; clarified to 'we have a museum nearby'. 'I don't know the name, but it's beautiful and it's beautiful and' is repetitive; use 'I don't know its name, and it's very beautiful'. Suggestions: use correct articles/plurals with 'museum', clear relative phrasing ('such as'/'the museum I know'), and avoid repetition.