Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı olmalı. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi ile başlayıp, ardından neden fotoğraf çektiğinizi açıklayan 1-2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini (uh, like) çıkarın. Ayrıca tekil/çoğul ve artikel kullanımına dikkat edin (e.g., “a photo” veya “photos”, “the building” yerine “important buildings”). Bağlaçlar (because, when, if) kullanarak mantıklı bir akış oluşturun ve cümle sayısını 3-4 ile sınırlayın.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. I usually photograph them when their architecture seems interesting because I like capturing unique details. For example, I focus on façades and decorative elements to study different styles later.

제안: Cevap daha kesin ve doğru bilgi içermeli; isimler ve ifadeler net olmalı. Konu cümlesiyle başlayın (I would like to visit...), sonra nedenini iki uygun destekleyici cümleyle açıklayın. Yanlış kelime kullanımlarından (kinks → kings? tenants?) kaçının ve yer adlarını düzgün yazın. Gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve bağlaçlarla mantıklı bağlantılar kurun.

예시: I would like to visit the Dolmabahçe Palace in Beşiktaş. It’s known for its splendid Ottoman architecture and richly decorated interiors, which I find fascinating. Visiting would let me see the ornate halls and historical artifacts up close.

× Yes, I take it the photo uh, for buildings.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings.

The original uses 'the photo' and 'it' incorrectly with the plural noun 'buildings'. Use the plural noun 'photos' to match 'buildings' and omit the unnecessary pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: say 'I take photos of buildings.' to keep noun number agreement and natural phrasing.

× If I think the buildings is important, uh, for the architecture, I take photo.

✓ If I think the buildings are important for architecture, I take photos.

'Buildings' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'take photo' should be 'take photos' to match plural meaning and common usage. 'For the architecture' is unnatural; use 'for architecture' or 'for their architecture'. Suggestion: 'If I think the buildings are important for architecture, I take photos.'

× Yes, I love the DOMA Pache Palace in Besiktas.

✓ Yes, I love the Doma Pache Palace in Besiktas.

This sentence is mostly correct but the name capitalization and spacing were inconsistent; ensure proper noun formatting. No grammatical change needed aside from consistent proper noun formatting. Suggestion: check spelling and capitalization of place names.

× Yeah, I know that place because it's very amazing and this building is so important for the architecture and some kinks live there.

✓ Yes, I know that place because it's amazing, and this building is very important for architecture; some kings lived there.

Several issues: 'very amazing' is redundant—'amazing' is sufficient; 'so important for the architecture' should be 'very important for architecture' or 'important to architecture'; 'some kinks' appears to be a typo for 'some kings' and the tense should be past ('lived') if referring to history. Also split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: 'Yes, I know that place because it's amazing, and this building is very important for architecture; some kings lived there.'