Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve natural phrasing and grammar, use a clear topic sentence, correct small errors and avoid redundancy. Start directly (don’t use ‘Yet’), use articles and plural agreement, and combine ideas with a linking word. Also keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, such as high-rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to a shopping mall. From my window I can see three skyscrapers, which makes the area feel modern and lively.

제안: Be careful with tense and article usage, avoid short repetitive sentences, and add a specific detail or reason with a linking word. Correct time expressions (e.g., ‘last month’) and platform references (no article for Instagram). Keep answers natural and concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I’m fascinated by both modern architecture and historic structures. For example, last month I took a photo of the Forbidden City and posted it on Instagram, where it got many positive comments.

제안: Clarify word choice and avoid incorrect adjectives (‘ironic’ is inappropriate). Use a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason or detail with a linking word. Keep it natural and concise, and correct contractions and article use.

예시: I would definitely like to visit the Great Wall one day because it is an iconic landmark and I’m curious about its history and impressive scale. Seeing the wall in person would be an unforgettable experience.

× Yet there are several tall buildings near my home, including high rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to shopping mall.

✓ There are several tall buildings near my home, including high-rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to a shopping mall.

The sentence begins with 'Yet' which is unnecessary and awkward here; remove it. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun (adjective formation). 'Shopping mall' needs the article 'a' because it refers to one non-specific mall. Also ensure consistent article use and noun phrases.

× From my window I can see 3 skyscrapers which makes the area feel lovely and modern.

✓ From my window I can see three skyscrapers, which make the area feel lovely and modern.

The relative clause 'which makes' modifies 'three skyscrapers' (plural), so the verb must agree in number: use 'make' not 'makes'. Also write numbers in words for small counts in formal speech: 'three' instead of '3'. Include a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause.

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I find both modern architecture and historical buildings fascinating.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I find both modern and historical architecture fascinating.

The original phrase 'modern architecture and historical buildings' mixes parallel structures. Make them parallel by using 'modern and historical architecture' or 'modern and historical buildings'. This improves coherence and correct prepositional/nominal usage.

× At last month, I took a picture of Forbidden City and posted on the Instagram.

✓ Last month, I took a picture of the Forbidden City and posted it on Instagram.

Use 'Last month' without 'At'. Proper name 'Forbidden City' typically takes the definite article 'the'. When saying you posted the picture, include the object pronoun 'it'. 'Instagram' as a platform noun does not need 'the' unless referring to the specific account; use 'on Instagram'. Also word order corrected.

× It's really fine.

✓ It was really good.

Context refers to a past event ('Last month, I took a picture...'), so the comment about the photo should match past tense: 'It was'. 'Fine' is vague; 'good' or 'nice' is more natural when evaluating a photo. Adjust adjective choice and tense.

× I definitely would like to visit the Great Wall one day because it's such an ironic landmark and I think it would be amazing to see it in person.

✓ I would definitely like to visit the Great Wall one day because it's such an iconic landmark, and I think it would be amazing to see it in person.

The word 'ironic' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'iconic' (widely known and symbolic). Move adverb 'definitely' to a natural position ('would definitely like' or 'would like to' is acceptable). Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses.