Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and conciseness: give a clear topic sentence, avoid run-on sentences, correct minor grammar, and add one specific detail. Use linking words for coherence. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, several high‑rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to a shopping mall dominate the view, and I can see three skyscrapers from my window. Because of these buildings, the area feels lively and modern.

제안: Good content and structure. To improve further, add a specific example of a building or detail you like, and use a linking phrase to connect reasons and actions. Maintain natural vocabulary and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I find both modern architecture and historic structures fascinating. For instance, I like capturing the ornate facades of the old town hall as well as the clean lines of new glass towers. I then edit my best shots and sometimes post them on social media to share with friends.

제안: Avoid repetition and tighten sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Correct minor grammar (remove duplicated words) and be more precise about what you expect to experience.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Great Wall one day because it is an iconic and historic landmark. Firstly, I want to see its scale and the ancient construction up close; secondly, I’m curious about the views along the wall and how the landscape changes, since I’ve only seen it in films and photos.

× Yes, there are several buildings near my home, including high rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to a shopping mall and from my window I can see 3 skyscrapers which makes the area feel lively and more than.

✓ Yes, there are several buildings near my home, including high-rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to a shopping mall, and from my window I can see three skyscrapers, which make the area feel lively and more modern.

This sentence has multiple structure and agreement issues. 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective. The number '3' should be written as a word 'three' in formal spoken/written answers. 'which makes' is incorrect because the relative clause refers to 'three skyscrapers' (plural), so the verb should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'and more than' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended 'more modern' or another comparative; I corrected it to 'more modern' to complete the thought. Suggestion: break long sentences into clear clauses, ensure hyphenation for compound adjectives, use words for small numbers in formal answers, and match verb number to the subject.

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I find both modern architecture and historic structures fascinating. I enjoy capturing their design details and sometimes post my favorite shots on social media to share.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I find both modern architecture and historic structures fascinating. I enjoy capturing their design details and sometimes post my favorite shots on social media to share.

This sentence is grammatically correct for present tense usage and needs no correction. It correctly uses present simple to describe habitual actions. No changes required.

× I would like to visit the Great Wall one day. There are a couple of reasons. For one thing, it's such an iconic landmark and I think it's it would be amazing to see it in person. For another thing, it's magnificent and has appeared in so many films and photos.

✓ I would like to visit the Great Wall one day. There are a couple of reasons. For one thing, it's such an iconic landmark and I think it would be amazing to see it in person. For another thing, it's magnificent and has appeared in so many films and photos.

The original contains an extra word 'it's' before 'it would be amazing', producing redundancy and a sentence structure error. Removing the extra 'it's' yields 'I think it would be amazing', which correctly expresses a hypothetical/intentional stance using 'would'. The rest of the sentences correctly use present perfect 'has appeared' to describe past occurrences with relevance now. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch duplicate words and ensure the modal structure 'I think it would' is used correctly.