Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically correct, avoid repetition, and give one clear supporting detail. Use a single topic sentence followed by a brief specific reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct subject-verb agreement and article use.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. When I lived in Japan, my neighbourhood had several high-rises, so I’m not used to seeing them here.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then add a specific reason or example using linking words (for example, because, so, when). Avoid vague phrases; be concise and coherent. Use correct collocations (e.g., “mixture of nature and urban life” -> “blend of nature and urban life”).

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially tall ones at sunset, because the light highlights their shapes. For example, in Tokyo I took several photos showing a nice blend of green parks and modern skyscrapers.

제안: Give one clear answer, correct factual phrasing, and provide a precise reason with linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and repetition (e.g., 'in Japan there is a Tokyo Tower, Sky Tower'). Use the correct name and a concise reason why you want to visit.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Tokyo Tower, which is one of the tallest landmarks in Japan. I’d like to go to the top because it offers panoramic views of the city and helps me appreciate the urban atmosphere.

× No, the place where I live there is no tall buildings.

✓ No, where I live there are no tall buildings.

The sentence uses 'there is' with a plural noun 'tall buildings'. Use 'there are' for plural subjects. Also remove the redundant 'the place' or reposition to 'where I live' for natural word order. Suggestion: 'No, where I live there are no tall buildings.'

× Since I I was in Japan, my place was surrounded by a tall building.

✓ When I was in Japan, my area was surrounded by tall buildings.

'Since' is used incorrectly for a past time reference; 'when' is appropriate. Also 'I I' is a typo. 'My place was surrounded by a tall building' is awkward and mismatches singular/plural: use 'area' and plural 'tall buildings' or singular consistently. Suggestion: 'When I was in Japan, my area was surrounded by tall buildings.'

× Yes I do, especially tall buildings and sunset.

✓ Yes, I do, especially tall buildings and sunsets.

List items should be parallel and 'sunset' as a hobby usually uses plural 'sunsets' or 'the sunset'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: 'Yes, I do, especially tall buildings and sunsets.'

× When I was in a big city in Japan, I was impressed by the scenery of mixture of nature and urban life.

✓ When I was in a big city in Japan, I was impressed by the mixture of nature and urban life.

'Scenery of mixture' is awkward; 'the mixture of nature and urban life' or 'the scenery, a mixture of nature and urban life' is more natural. Remove redundant 'scenery of'. Suggestion: '...I was impressed by the mixture of nature and urban life.'

× Yes, in Japan there is a Tokyo Tower, Sky Tower, which is the highest tower in my country, so I'd like to visit that building on the top to see around the urban atmosphere from that area.

✓ Yes, in Japan there is Tokyo Tower and Sky Tree; the Sky Tree is the tallest tower in my country, so I'd like to visit its top to look around and see the urban atmosphere.

Incorrect use of articles ('a Tokyo Tower') and confusing naming; proper nouns usually omit 'a'. 'Sky Tower' likely refers to 'Sky Tree' or similar—ensure correct name. 'Which is the highest tower in my country' modifies the wrong noun; clarify with 'the Sky Tree is the tallest tower'. 'Visit that building on the top' is ungrammatical; use 'visit its top' or 'go to the top'. 'See around the urban atmosphere from that area' is awkward — use 'look around and see the urban atmosphere.' Suggestion: 'Yes, in Japan there is Tokyo Tower and Sky Tree; the Sky Tree is the tallest tower in my country, so I'd like to visit its top to look around and see the urban atmosphere.'