Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer does not address the question. Stay on topic by giving a clear direct response first (e.g., yes/no and brief description of the surroundings). Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and include specific details such as number of tall buildings, their purpose (offices, flats), or how close they are. Use linking words (for example, moreover, however) only when adding one or two supporting details.

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, two 20-storey apartment blocks and a 15-storey office tower stand within a 10-minute walk. They make the area feel quite urban and provide good views from higher floors. As a result, I often see bright city lights in the evening.

제안: This answer is off-topic and too vague. Begin with a direct statement answering the question (e.g., Yes/No and frequency). Then add one or two specific reasons why you do or don’t take photos (interests, purpose, style). Keep language natural and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I travel. I enjoy capturing architectural details like facades and windows because they show how a city has developed. For instance, I recently photographed an old cathedral to study its stone carvings and lighting.

제안: Your answer should start by naming a specific building you want to visit. Then give 1–2 clear reasons and a brief detail (location, architecture, history) using linking words to make it coherent. Avoid vague emotional phrases without context.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Sagrada Família in Barcelona. I want to see its unique architecture and intricate facades because Gaudí’s design mixes natural forms with religious symbolism. Also, I am curious about the interior lighting effects created by the stained glass windows.

× In my personal experience, uh, I can still picture the moment in my mind because let me tell you a story about that.

✓ In my personal experience, I can still picture the moment in my mind; let me tell you a story about it.

The original sentence is run-on and includes a filler 'uh' and an awkward 'because let me tell you a story about that' which mixes a subordinate clause incorrectly. Replace the comma splice with a semicolon or split into two sentences and remove filler. Use 'it' to refer back to 'the moment' for clarity.

× Something unforgettable happened that day.

✓ Something unforgettable happened that day.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It is a complete past-tense statement appropriate to the context.

× Honestly, it was one of the best moments of my life.

✓ Honestly, it was one of the best moments of my life.

This sentence is correct and matches past-tense narration; no change required.

× To some extent, it changed the way I think.

✓ To some extent, it changed the way I thought.

The sentence mixes past action 'changed' with present-tense 'think'. For consistency in past narration, change 'think' to the past tense 'thought'.

× It definitely influenced my future decisions.

✓ It definitely influenced my future decisions.

This sentence is acceptable as is. 'Influenced' (past) and 'future decisions' is a valid combination because past influence affects later decisions. No change necessary.

× I felt relieved, excited, and motivated afterward.

✓ I felt relieved, excited, and motivated afterward.

This sentence is grammatically correct and lists parallel adjectives properly; no correction needed.

× It was surprisingly, surprisingly helpful for my personal growth.

✓ It was surprisingly helpful for my personal growth.

The adverb 'surprisingly' is duplicated unnecessarily. Remove the repetition to make the sentence concise and grammatical.

× To some extent, it changed the way I think.

✓ To some extent, it changed the way I thought.

Repeated sentence: same error as before—mixing past 'changed' with present 'think'. Use past 'thought' for tense consistency.

× While some people might find it boring, for me it was unforgettable.

✓ Some people might find it boring, but for me it was unforgettable.

The original uses 'While... for me' which is awkward. Replacing 'While' with a straightforward contrast using 'but' clarifies the contrast between others' opinions and the speaker's.

× It had a very calming atmosphere.

✓ It had a very calming atmosphere.

This sentence is correct; 'calming' properly modifies 'atmosphere' and the adverb 'very' is used appropriately.

× The place was incredibly lively and colorful.

✓ The place was incredibly lively and colorful.

This sentence is correct; adjectives 'lively' and 'colorful' are used properly and 'incredibly' modifies them correctly.

× The moment I felt extremely meaning to me.

✓ The moment felt extremely meaningful to me.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and word form: 'I felt extremely meaning to me' is ungrammatical. Use 'felt' with the adjective 'meaningful' and position 'to me' after it: 'The moment felt extremely meaningful to me.' Alternatively, 'That moment was extremely meaningful to me.'

× The environment was peaceful and refreshing.

✓ The environment was peaceful and refreshing.

This sentence is correct; adjectives 'peaceful' and 'refreshing' are used appropriately.