Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid irrelevant words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct article and noun usage (e.g., "an office building"), and remove unrelated fragments like "There is a table." Aim for 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "also" or "besides."

예시: Yes. Taipei 101 is near my home and it is one of the tallest buildings in the city. It is both an office tower and a shopping mall, so I often go there to shop or eat.

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetitive phrases, and organize your answer: topic sentence plus supporting detail with a linking word. Be specific about when and why you take photos (e.g., "when I travel" or "because it's historic"). Use correct verb forms and pluralization ("pictures"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially notable ones. For example, I often photograph my high school because it is a historic and beautiful building, so I like taking pictures of its corners and facades.

제안: Provide a clear, fluent response with correct names and articles, and avoid excessive repetition. State the building's name once, give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" or "since"), and correct grammar ("an ancient palace"). If unsure about pronunciation, say the location instead. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Forbidden City in China because it is an ancient imperial palace with a long history. I am interested in its architecture and cultural significance, so I hope to see it in person.

× Yes, there is a tall building called Taipei 101 and it is near my home.

✓ Yes, there is a tall building called Taipei 101, and it is near my home.

Minor punctuation: add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses. This is not strictly a 'There be' grammar error but improves sentence clarity and maintains correct structure.

× There is a table.

✓ (Remove sentence)

This sentence is irrelevant and breaks the flow; it appears accidentally inserted. Remove it to maintain coherence. If the student intended to describe a table, they should add context, e.g. 'There is a table in my living room.'

× 101 is also a office and the shopping mall.

✓ Taipei 101 is also an office and has a shopping mall.

Article error: use 'an' before a word beginning with a vowel sound ('office'). Also the original lacks a proper verb for the shopping mall; 'has a shopping mall' or 'contains a shopping mall' is correct. Include the full name 'Taipei 101' for clarity.

× Yes, I, I, sometimes I would take, I would take a picture of the building, just I say the tallest building type one-on-one umm, or my high school.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take pictures of buildings, especially the tallest ones or my high school.

Overuse of 'would' here is unnecessary when describing habitual action; present simple 'take' is appropriate. Sentence is also disfluent and unclear; simplify structure, use plural 'pictures' for repeated actions, and rephrase 'tallest ones' rather than 'type one-on-one'.

× My high school is a historic site and it's very beautiful.

✓ My high school is a historic site, and it's very beautiful.

Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses for clarity. Article usage is correct; this correction improves punctuation and flow.

× So I take a lot of picture, umm, at the corner of my school.

✓ So I take a lot of pictures at the corner of my school.

Pluralization: use plural 'pictures' when referring to multiple photos. Remove filler 'umm' in formal responses and keep preposition 'at the corner of my school' which is acceptable.

× Yes, I want to, I really want to visit the Umm Zi Jing Chen in China.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit the Zijinchen (or 'Purple Forbidden City') in China.

Redundancy: remove repeated 'I want to'. Also correct romanization/spelling: likely 'Zijinchen' or more common 'the Forbidden City' (if that's intended). Ensure proper name form: include article 'the' if using 'Forbidden City.'

× Zi Jing Chen, it's a it's a ancient palace in China.

✓ Zijinchen is an ancient palace in China.

Article error: use 'an' before a vowel sound ('ancient'), and remove duplicate 'it's a'. Also combine into a single clear clause without repetition.

× There's there's a long history here there, so I really want to go to there.

✓ There is a long history there, so I really want to go there.

Reduce repetition: remove duplicate 'there's' and the extra 'to' before 'there'. Use 'there' once at end: 'go there'. Ensure 'There is' is used correctly to state existence and follow with location reference 'there.'