Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., "since I'm living" → "because I live") and redundant clauses. Also stay within 3–4 sentences and correct small grammar issues.

예시: Yes. I live in a big city, so there are many tall buildings nearby. For instance, my current apartment is one of the tallest in the neighborhood, which gives me a great view. However, I sometimes miss the smaller houses and open spaces in the countryside.

제안: Begin with a direct answer and then give a clear reason with natural phrasing. Fix grammar ("don't enjoy taking photos"), avoid vague phrases like "I believe the concept of being in the present"—replace with a concise explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer to enjoy the moment. I also rarely take selfies; instead, I remember places by looking around and soaking in the atmosphere.

제안: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement of which type of building you would like to visit, then give specific reasons and an example. Remove confusing fragments (e.g., "in It's a day that I've been to") and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit art museums and galleries because they have a unique atmosphere and display interesting artworks. For example, I enjoy exploring exhibitions where I can see local sculptures and paintings, even if I'm more interested in the art than the architecture itself.

× Yes, since I'm living in a big city, skyscrapers are everywhere.

✓ Yes, since I live in a big city, skyscrapers are everywhere.

Use simple present 'I live' instead of present continuous 'I'm living' for a permanent situation or general fact. Suggestion: use simple present to describe where you live or habitual states.

× For example, the apartment that I am living in right now is one of the tallest buildings around the neighborhood.

✓ For example, the apartment that I live in right now is one of the tallest buildings in the neighborhood.

When describing your current residence as a general fact, use simple present 'I live' rather than 'I am living'. Also use 'in the neighborhood' rather than 'around the neighborhood' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: prefer simple present for regular states and use correct prepositional phrase 'in the neighborhood'.

× No, I don't enjoy to taking a photo of high buildings.

✓ No, I don't enjoy taking photos of tall buildings.

After verbs like 'enjoy', use the gerund (-ing) not 'to' plus verb. Also use plural 'photos' for general activity and 'tall' is more natural than 'high' for buildings. Suggestion: use 'enjoy taking' and pluralize when speaking generally.

× I rarely take a selfie myself.

✓ I rarely take selfies myself.

Plural 'selfies' is natural when speaking about frequency in general. 'Myself' is acceptable for emphasis but not necessary; here it is okay but pluralizing 'selfie' improves fluency. Suggestion: use plural nouns for habitual actions.

× I believe the concept of being in the present, so I create memory by looking at them, not by taking photos.

✓ I believe in being present, so I create memories by looking at them rather than taking photos.

'Believe the concept of' is awkward; use 'believe in' with gerund 'being present'. 'Create memory' should be plural 'create memories'. Use 'rather than' to contrast actions. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'believe in being present', 'create memories', 'rather than'.

× Yes, I enjoy to give a visit to art buildings in It's a day that I've been to because they have unique vibe compared to other buildings around the city and I enjoy to looking at different arts, but not particularly because of the building.

✓ Yes, I enjoy visiting art buildings because they have a unique vibe compared to other buildings in the city, and I enjoy looking at different artworks, although it's not particularly because of the building itself.

Multiple issues: after 'enjoy' use gerund 'visiting' and 'looking' rather than 'to give a visit' or 'to looking'. 'It's a day that I've been to' is unclear and ungrammatical so removed; keep tense consistent. Use 'a unique vibe' and 'in the city' for correct preposition. Use 'artworks' rather than 'arts' for things you look at. Add 'itself' to clarify contrast. Suggestion: simplify sentence, use gerunds after 'enjoy', correct prepositions, and choose precise nouns like 'artworks'.