Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and informative, but it is a little long and has minor grammatical and cohesion issues. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Watch subject-verb agreement and article use (e.g., “apartment blocks” vs “an apartment block”).

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because the area is densely populated. For example, most people live in high-rise apartment blocks, which allow more housing on limited land.

제안: Good clear opinion, but avoid filler words and informal phrases (“you know,” “stuff”). Keep sentences concise and correct small errors (singular/plural, adverb forms). Use linking words to contrast preferences (e.g., “however,” “but”).

예시: Not really. I prefer photographing natural scenery such as trees and the sky because I find those scenes more visually appealing; however, I sometimes photograph dramatic buildings when their architecture is striking.

제안: Clear and relevant answer with good content. Remove conversational fillers (e.g., “you know”) and combine ideas for fluency. Provide one specific reason and one brief supporting detail or example to enrich the response.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Great Wall of China because it is an impressive feat of engineering given the limited resources available in ancient times, and I would like to learn about the historical events and construction methods behind it.

× most people have to live in a high rise apartment blocks which allows more housing in a small place.

✓ most people have to live in high-rise apartment blocks, which allow more housing in a small area.

Incorrect passive voice isn't exactly the issue; the main problems are subject-verb agreement and article/word form. 'Apartment blocks' (plural) must match the verb 'allow' (plural). 'a high rise apartment blocks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'blocks' and misses the hyphen in 'high-rise'. 'A small place' is unnatural; 'a small area' is better. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches verbs and use correct articles and hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× I usually prefer taking photos of a natural scenery like trees or skies stuff because I find such landscape more interesting, more visually attractive.

✓ I usually prefer taking photos of natural scenery like trees or the sky because I find such landscapes more interesting and more visually attractive.

Problems: countability and article use ('a natural scenery' is incorrect; 'scenery' is uncountable and needs no article), plural agreement ('landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match general statement), word choice ('skies stuff' is informal and awkward; use 'the sky' or 'skies'), and conjunction use ('more interesting, more visually attractive' better joined with 'and'). Suggestion: use uncountable nouns without 'a', make nouns/plurals consistent, and use standard collocations.

× But sometime I will take a photo of, you know, dramatic looking buildings.

✓ But sometimes I take a photo of, you know, dramatic-looking buildings.

Errors: 'sometime' (adverb meaning at an unspecified time) should be 'sometimes' for 'occasionally'. Using 'will' here is unnecessary for habitual actions; present simple 'take' is appropriate. Also use hyphen in compound adjective 'dramatic-looking'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' for habitual frequency and the simple present for repeated actions.

× I think it's an impressive building, you know, especially if you take into account the limited resources of the ancient times.

✓ I think it's an impressive structure, especially if you take into account the limited resources of ancient times.

Problems: 'building' is not the best collocate for the Great Wall (use 'structure'), and 'the ancient times' is unidiomatic; 'ancient times' without 'the' is preferred. Subject-verb agreement per se is fine, but the sentence has article and word-choice errors. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns and omit unnecessary definite articles with broad historical periods.

× Well yes, there are many tall buildings in my neighborhood because the area is densely populated and the land is limited so most people have to live in a high rise apartment blocks which allows more housing in a small place.

✓ Well, yes, there are many tall buildings in my neighborhood because the area is densely populated and land is limited, so most people have to live in high-rise apartment blocks, which allow more housing in a small area.

Multiple article and punctuation issues: 'the land is limited' -> 'land is limited' or keep 'the' consistently; 'a high rise apartment blocks' mixes singular article with plural noun; use commas to separate clauses. Also use 'high-rise' hyphen and plural verb 'allow' to agree with 'blocks'. Suggestion: check articles (a/the) match noun number and use commas to clarify clauses.