Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 改进语法与用词，简化表达并更自然地组织句子；避免重复并用连接词使表述连贯。例如纠正“sky crafts”为“skyscrapers”，删除重复短语，“I am living”改为“I live”。可以在第二句加入一个具体例子来丰富内容。

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Shanghai. For example, I can see modern skyscrapers like the Shanghai Tower as well as several historical buildings nearby, which together make the city look very attractive.

제안: 改善语法顺序，去除冗余短语并给出清晰的理由；用连接词表明对比（例如however, because）。目前句子有重复与语法错误，应改为简洁明了的表达并补充一两句具体情况。

예시: I only take photos of buildings when I find them particularly attractive or impressive. However, I usually focus on photographing people because portraits capture personal stories and emotions better.

제안: 修正词汇与拼写错误（如“charges”应为“churches”或“landmarks”，Europa应为Europe），并给出具体原因与细节来支撑回答。可用连接词列举并说明为什么想去。

예시: Yes, there are several buildings I'd like to visit, especially abroad. For instance, I want to see the Eiffel Tower in France because of its iconic design, and I would also like to visit historic churches and landmarks across Europe to learn about their architecture and history.

× Sure, there are some tall buildings near the place I live since I am living in the big city Shanghai.

✓ Sure, there are some tall buildings near the place I live since I am living in the big city of Shanghai.

句中缺少介词短语“of”来表示所属关系，正确说法是“the big city of Shanghai”（“上海这座大城市”）。虽然口语中有时省略“of”，但在规范表达中需要使用“of”来连接名词与其描述。建议在表所属或归属时使用“of + 名词”。

× There are so many sky crafts and so many historical buildings in this city.

✓ There are so many skyscrapers and many historical buildings in this city.

“sky crafts”不是常用词，正确词是“skyscrapers”（摩天大楼）。另外，“so many”重复使用显得冗余，第二处改为“many”更自然。建议学习常用名词搭配并避免重复相同程度副词。

× They make the they make this city so attractive.

✓ They make this city so attractive.

原句出现重复“they make”，导致句子结构错误。删除重复部分即可。建议书写或口述前快速复核，避免重复同一短语。

× I'll take photos on if only if when I think the buildings are very attractive and impressive.

✓ I'll take photos only if I think the buildings are very attractive and impressive.

原句中出现多个连词“on if only if when”混用，导致时态和句法混乱。保留“only if”表示条件，且使用“I'll take”表达将来意图。建议学习常见条件连词用法并避免重复。

× I prefer I focus on persons.

✓ I prefer to focus on people.

“I prefer I focus on persons”结构不正确。应使用“不定式/动名词做宾语”如“prefer to focus on”或“prefer focusing on”。此外，英语中通常用“people”而不是“persons”在一般语境。建议使用“prefer to + 动词”或“prefer + 动名词”，并用“people”。

× Yes, there are several buildings I want to visit, but most of them are abroad, like the Eiffel Tower in France and some historical charges in Europa.

✓ Yes, there are several buildings I want to visit, but most of them are abroad, like the Eiffel Tower in France and some historical churches in Europe.

“charges”拼写错误且用词不当，应为“churches”（教堂）或其他历史建筑；“Europa”为外语拼写，英语中应为“Europe”。同时“several buildings”与“most of them are abroad”搭配正确，但要替换错误词。建议注意单复数拼写和常见专有名词的正确英语形式。