Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct plural and prepositions, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several high-rise condominiums and a large shopping mall about ten minutes away. In addition, the area has modern residential towers, which makes the skyline quite impressive.

제안: Improve grammar, verb forms and sentence flow. Begin with a direct topic sentence, use linking words to add details (why or how you take photos), and avoid repetition of adjectives. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, photography is one of my hobbies. I especially enjoy photographing interesting buildings because I like their shapes and details. I store my best shots on my phone and sometimes share them with friends on social media.

제안: Remove hesitations and filler words, and make sentences complete and precise. Start with a clear answer, give a reason with a linking word, and finish with a concise detail about what interests you. Correct verb and noun agreement.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Parliament building in my hometown. I have heard its architecture is magnificent, and I want to see the grand halls and decorative details. In addition, I think visiting it would help me learn more about our history and culture.

× Yes, there are many tall building near to my home and there are shopping mall.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and there are shopping malls.

The nouns 'building' and 'shopping mall' should be plural because 'many' and the context indicate more than one. Also 'near to' is incorrect collocation; use 'near' without 'to'. Use a comma and conjunction to join clauses correctly. Suggestion: Make nouns agree in number with quantifiers (many + plural) and use 'near' not 'near to'.

× Condos and residential buildings.

✓ There are condos and residential buildings.

This fragment lacks a main verb and subject; it should be a complete sentence. Adding 'There are' forms a correct existential clause. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments by including a verb when stating existence.

× Taking photographs is one of my hobby.

✓ Taking photographs is one of my hobbies.

'Hobby' should be plural after 'one of my' (singular and plural issue as well). The gerund 'Taking' is fine, but the noun must be 'hobbies'. Suggestion: After phrases like 'one of my', use a plural noun.

× I like to collecting beautiful and attractive photographs in my phone.

✓ I like collecting beautiful and attractive photographs on my phone.

Use either 'like to collect' or 'like collecting' — do not combine 'to' with the gerund. Also, use 'on my phone' rather than 'in my phone.' Suggestion: Choose correct verb pattern (like + gerund) and correct preposition for location.

× I also take some attractive and beautiful buildings photographs.

✓ I also take some attractive and beautiful photographs of buildings.

The noun phrase ordering is incorrect; the noun 'photographs' should be followed by 'of buildings' to show what the photos are of. 'Buildings photographs' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'photographs of [object]' or place adjectives before the noun.

× Sometime I share these photographs with my friends and.

✓ Sometimes I share these photographs with my friends.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' and the sentence ends with an extraneous 'and.' Remove the trailing conjunction and correct adverb form. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for frequency and avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

× And there are so many buildings in my hometown, but, uh, I would, if I had a chance, I would definitely like to visit a Parliament building.

✓ There are so many buildings in my hometown, but if I had the chance, I would definitely like to visit the Parliament building.

Avoid starting with 'And' and remove redundant commas. Use 'if I had the chance' (not 'a chance') and 'the Parliament building' is more natural. Also remove repeated 'I would'. Suggestion: Simplify clause structure and use definite article where specific building is implied.

× I heard about that.

✓ I have heard about it.

When describing prior knowledge relevant now, present perfect 'have heard' is better than simple past 'heard.' Also use 'it' instead of 'that' to refer to the building. Suggestion: Use present perfect to link past experience to present relevance and choose correct pronoun reference.

× The architecture is magnificent.

✓ The architecture is magnificent.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Suggestion: None.

× And uh, uh, it's also shows the culture of our.

✓ It also shows our culture.

'It's also shows' mixes contraction 'it's' (= it is) with a verb in present simple — use 'it also shows' (no 'is') or 'it also is showing' (progressive). The phrase 'the culture of our' is incomplete; use 'our culture.' Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb structure matches (no extra auxiliary) and complete possessive expressions.