Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте ответ прямо и грамотно: начните с чёткого утверждения, затем дайте одно-два конкретных пояснения. Уберите лишние слова и повторы, используйте правильную грамматику (напр., present simple для повседневных действий) и согласование артиклей. Например: «Yes, there are many tall apartment buildings near my home. I see them every day because I walk past them on my way to work.»

예시: Yes, there are many tall apartment buildings near my home. I see them every day because I walk past them on my way to work.

제안: Отвечайте ясно и избегайте заполнителей («um», «uh»). Начните с простого утверждения, затем дайте конкретную причину и пример. Используйте связующие слова для логики (because, for example). Поправьте словосочетания: say “I enjoy photography” или “I like taking photos of buildings.”

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I enjoy photography. For example, I usually photograph interesting facades and details when I walk around the city.

제안: Дайте чёткий ответ с конкретным примером: назовите здание и объясните почему. Избегайте повторов и говорильных пауз. Используйте одно-два предложения: первый — утверждение, второй — причина или описание. Уточните название или тип здания (e.g., mosque, museum) и опишите, что вас привлекает.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the historical monument in Astana because of its impressive architecture. I am especially interested in its ornate details and the history behind the building.

× Yes I live in the at the home and I everyday seeing tall buildings like apartments. I think it's tall buildings.

✓ Yes, I live at home and every day I see tall buildings like apartment blocks. I think they are tall buildings.

The student used incorrect prepositions and word order. Use 'live at home' not 'live in the at the home'. 'Every day' is the correct adverb phrase and should be placed before the verb: 'every day I see'. 'Seeing' is a present participle incorrectly used; the simple present 'see' is correct for habitual actions. 'Like apartments' is clearer as 'like apartment blocks' or 'such as apartment buildings'. Also the pronoun should agree: 'they are tall buildings' rather than 'it's tall buildings'. Suggestions: Use 'live at home', place time expressions correctly ('every day I see'), use simple present for habitual actions, match subject and verb number ('they are').

× Yes, when I see beautiful buildings or umm, good buildings, uh, after not seeing, I take a photo because I'm uh, aesthetic person and take a picture. It's my, it's enjoyed for me.

✓ Yes, when I see beautiful or interesting buildings, I take a photo because I'm an aesthetic person and I enjoy taking pictures.

The phrase 'after not seeing' is unclear and incorrect; it seems unnecessary. 'I'm uh, aesthetic person' lacks the article 'an' before a singular count noun. 'It's my, it's enjoyed for me' is ungrammatical — use 'I enjoy taking pictures' to express preference. Use the simple present 'I take' for habitual actions and 'I enjoy' for personal preference. Suggestions: remove filler phrases, add the article 'an' before 'aesthetic person', and use clear verbs ('enjoy taking pictures').

× I like, uh, I like, uh, historical buildings, uh, such as I think it's a beautiful, uh, sink in Astana. It's big and.

✓ I like historical buildings, such as the beautiful Baiterek in Astana. It is large and impressive.

The original sentence has repetition, filler sounds, and unclear reference 'sink' (likely a mispronunciation or wrong word). 'Such as I think it's a beautiful' is awkward and ungrammatical. Identify the building (for example 'Baiterek' or another landmark) and use the definite article 'the' for a specific landmark: 'the beautiful Baiterek in Astana.' Complete the second sentence: 'It is large and impressive.' Suggestions: avoid fillers, name the building correctly, use 'the' for specific landmarks, and finish sentences with a clear adjective.