Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "condos" and "condominiums"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and check word order (e.g., "I live in" before place).

예시: Yes. I live in Bangkok, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, my apartment is in a high-rise condominium complex, and there are several other skyscraper office and residential towers within walking distance.

제안: Make a clear, direct answer first, then give one reason with a specific example. Avoid hesitations and repeated phrases. Use linking words such as "but" or "however" to contrast frequency and condition.

예시: Sometimes. I only take photos if a building is famous or architecturally interesting; otherwise I rarely photograph buildings because many look similar to me. For instance, I photographed the MahaNakhon tower last year because its design is unique.

제안: Answer directly then expand with a clear reason and a brief contrast. Use correct vocabulary ("sea" not "see") and reduce filler words like "like" and "for now". Include a precise preference and one example of an alternative destination.

예시: Not really. I don't usually travel to see buildings because I prefer natural landscapes. For example, I would rather visit the mountains or coastal beaches to relax and enjoy outdoor activities.

× Yes there are, because I live in the capital city in Thailand, so of course I live in the skyscraper like condos.

✓ Yes, there are, because I live in the capital city of Thailand, so I live in a skyscraper-like condominium.

The phrase 'in the capital city in Thailand' is awkward; 'of Thailand' is correct preposition use (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Skyscraper like condos' needs hyphenation and singular noun for clarity: 'skyscraper-like condominium.' Also ensure article use: 'a skyscraper-like condominium' (Article errors, type 22). Overall this sentence uses 'there are' correctly but needs prepositions, articles, and adjective form fixed.

× So it is adjacent to many condominiums.

✓ It is adjacent to many condominiums.

The sentence begins with 'So' which is unnecessary; removing it improves style. 'Adjacent to' is correct preposition usage. Ensure subject 'It' refers clearly to the previous noun (a condominium). This fixes redundancy and clarity (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× Yes I do sometimes if the building is renowned because I don't I usually don't take photos of building because I think it I think they are like similar to the others.

✓ Yes, I do sometimes if a building is renowned, but I usually don't take photos of buildings because I think they are similar to others.

Multiple issues: punctuation and repetition removed; 'if the building is renowned' is generalized so 'a building' fits better (Article errors, type 22). 'I don't I usually don't' and 'it I think' are disfluencies removed. 'Photos of building' needs plural 'buildings' (Singular and plural issue, type 1). Tense remains present simple for habitual actions (Present tense issue, type 6).

× I usually do not travel for a building so for now I don't think I have in my mind.

✓ I usually do not travel to see a building, so for now I don't have one in mind.

'Travel for a building' is unnatural; use 'travel to see a building' (Preposition and verb choice, type 11). 'I don't think I have in my mind' is incorrect order; 'I don't have one in mind' is concise and idiomatic. Tense remains present simple for habitual/general state (Present tense issue, type 6).

× So if I would like to travel I would go for like mountains or see or beaches.

✓ If I wanted to travel, I would go to the mountains or the sea or the beaches.

This is a conditional sentence expressing an imaginary situation; use 'If I wanted..., I would...' rather than 'If I would like...' (Incorrect conjunction/conditional use, type 16). 'Go for like mountains or see or beaches' has wrong prepositions and a typo: use 'go to the mountains, the sea, or the beaches.' Also remove filler 'like.'