Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific details and a linking word. For example, say where your home is and how that explains the presence of tall buildings.

예시: Yes — there are many tall buildings near my home. Although my house is close to a small forest, it is located in central Tokyo, so many office towers and apartment blocks surround it.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and give a brief reason and an example. Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not especially interested in architecture. Instead, I prefer photographing fruits and my friends, because those pictures capture memories and familiar moments.

제안: Be specific about the building: give its name or type, one clear reason to visit, and one supporting detail. Use correct vocabulary and linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the National Art Library someday because it houses an extensive collection of artist biographies and historical manuscripts. For example, I want to see rare sketchbooks and learn about the history behind the artworks.

× Yes, there are many high buildings around my house.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings around my house.

The original sentence used 'high buildings' which is understandable but 'tall buildings' is the more natural collocation in English. This is a word choice issue related to adjective usage modifying plural noun; use 'tall buildings' to sound natural.

× My home is in is around forest however is center of Tokyo so it's close to office.

✓ My home is near a forest, but it is in the center of Tokyo, so it's close to my office.

The original sentence has redundant words ('is in is'), missing articles, and incorrect word order. Correct by using 'near a forest' (preposition and article), 'in the center of Tokyo' (definite article), and 'close to my office' (possessive pronoun). This fixes sentence structure and article problems.

× That's fine.

✓ That's fine.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change. It functions as a brief response.

× I'm not take photos from buildings because I'm not keen to take photo especial buildings.

✓ I don't take photos of buildings because I'm not keen on taking photos, especially of buildings.

Use the simple present negative 'I don't take' not 'I'm not take'. Prepositions: 'photos of buildings' not 'from buildings'. Use 'keen on' followed by gerund 'taking photos'. 'Especially' spelling corrected and 'of buildings' added for clarity.

× However, I like to take photo of fruits and my friends.

✓ However, I like to take photos of fruit and of my friends.

Use plural 'photos'. 'Fruit' as an uncountable noun is natural here (or 'fruits' if referring to different kinds). Add 'of' before 'my friends' for parallel structure.

× Umm, sometimes these photos remind me of the my the.

✓ Umm, sometimes these photos remind me of my past/them/the time I took them.

The original is ungrammatical and contains extra articles ('the my the'). Provide possible coherent completions: 'remind me of my past', 'remind me of the time I took them', or 'remind me of them'. Choose one based on intended meaning.

× Yes, I have building that I would like to visit someday.

✓ Yes, I have a building that I would like to visit someday.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before the singular count noun 'building'. Singular nouns need an article or determiner.

× It's infinite and library.

✓ It's an impressive and infinite library.

The original is fragmented and misses an article. 'Infinite' is unusual to describe a building; adding 'impressive' or 'huge' makes it natural. Include 'an' before the noun and make 'library' clearly a noun modified by adjectives.

× It's so his.

✓ It's so beautiful/huge/interesting.

'So his' is meaningless here. Replace with a suitable adjective such as 'beautiful', 'huge', or 'impressive' to convey the intended meaning.

× It has so long story history and background of artist and so.

✓ It has a very long history and a background related to artists, among other things.

Original has incorrect word order and missing articles. Use 'a very long history' (article + adjective + noun), and 'background related to artists' for clarity. 'And so' is informal; replace with 'among other things' if needed.