Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите более уверенно и грамотно: используйте простые корректные конструкции, избегайте лишних слова и повторов. Начните с короткого прямого предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей и связку. Например: «Yes, there are many tall buildings near my dormitory. It's in the centre of Almaty, so there are university buildings, shops and cafes nearby.» Обратите внимание на порядок слов и предлоги (near my dormitory, in the centre).

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my dormitory. Because I live in the centre of Almaty, there are university buildings, office blocks and several cafes close by.

제안: Говорите более точно и используйте связующие слова для логики: начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину и дайте пример. Избегайте повтора артиклей и слов (a a, buildings/ a building). Например: «Not usually, because architecture doesn't interest me, but I sometimes take photos of particularly attractive or historic buildings.» Также исправьте слова и согласование (a beautiful building, I take a photo).

예시: Not usually, because architecture doesn't really interest me, but I sometimes take photos of particularly attractive or historic buildings, for example an old mosque or a modern glass tower.

제안: Говорите более ясно и давайте конкретику: назовите здание и объясните почему, используйте логические связки и корректные выражения о цене и удобствах. Избегайте пасты-слов («uh», «um») и неясных фраз. Например: «Yes, I would like to visit the X Hotel because it looks comfortable and affordable, and it has good reviews and a nice spa.»

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Serenity Hotel because it looks comfortable and reasonably priced; it also has good reviews and a relaxing spa, so I could rest there.

제안: Давайте прямой ответ и объяснения с конкретикой: сформулируйте причину, приведите пример риска или преимущества и используйте связки (because, for example, however). Избегайте повторов и неточных слов (there are some diseases — лучше сказать earthquakes, or environmental problems). Например: «I prefer a small house because it feels safer and quieter; for example, in Almaty I worry about earthquakes and crowded high-rises.»

예시: I prefer to live in a small house because it feels safer and quieter. For example, in Almaty I worry about earthquakes and the crowded conditions in some high-rise buildings, so a low house seems better for me.

× It's actually there are plenty of tall buildings near to my dormitory.

✓ There are plenty of tall buildings near my dormitory.

The sentence incorrectly combines 'It's' with 'there are'. Use only 'There are' to state existence. Also 'near to' is incorrect here; use 'near' without 'to'. Suggestion: start the sentence with 'There are' and omit 'to' after 'near'.

× Honestly I live in dormitory and in the center of Almaty is it's for example university and some cafes.

✓ Honestly, I live in a dormitory in the center of Almaty; for example, there is a university and some cafes nearby.

The original has unclear word order and extra words like 'is it's'. Use articles ('a dormitory') and correct word order. Use 'there is' to introduce 'a university' and separate ideas with punctuation. Suggestion: use clear clause order: subject + verb + complement and use 'nearby' to indicate proximity.

× Usually I don't take photos of buildings because for me it's not interesting, but when I see a a beautiful buildings like relaxers or somethings like this I of course I take photo.

✓ Usually I don't take photos of buildings because it is not interesting for me, but when I see a beautiful building, like a landmark or something like that, I, of course, take a photo.

Errors: double article 'a a', plural 'buildings' mismatched with 'a beautiful', missing articles before countable nouns, and word choice ('relaxers' incorrect). Use third person singular 'it is' or contraction 'it's'. Also 'take photo' needs an article: 'take a photo'. Suggestion: use correct articles and singular/plural agreement and choose appropriate vocabulary like 'landmark' or 'interesting building'.

× Uh, actually, yes, it's a hotel, uh, uh, name called services.

✓ Actually, yes, it's a hotel called 'Services'.

The phrase 'name called services' is incorrect. Use 'called' directly after the noun: 'a hotel called Services'. If giving the hotel's name, capitalize or quote it. Suggestion: say 'a hotel called X' or 'the hotel is called X'.

× I want to uh, visit here and I want to rest here because it's a little this, uh, building is a little bit it's umm, not expensive, but I think it's cost of.

✓ I want to visit it and rest there because the building is not very expensive, but I am not sure about the price.

Awkward phrasing 'a little this', repetition 'a little bit it's', and 'it's cost of' are incorrect. Use 'visit it' and 'rest there'. Use adverb 'not very expensive' and a clear phrase for uncertainty: 'I am not sure about the price'. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use concise adjective/adverb phrases.

× Actually now I want to live in a in small house because it's safe, safer than tall buildings, especially in Almaty because there are some diseases.

✓ At the moment I want to live in a small house because it is safer than tall buildings, especially in Almaty because there are some disasters.

Remove the extra 'a in'. Use 'a small house'. 'Safer than tall buildings' is fine. The word 'diseases' is likely wrong in context; perhaps 'disasters' (e.g., earthquakes) was intended. Suggestion: choose correct noun (disasters) and correct article placement.

× Uh, actually, uh, actually I want to live in small house.

✓ Actually, I want to live in a small house.

Repeated fillers 'uh, actually' and missing article 'a' before 'small house'. Simplify by removing repetitions and add the article. Suggestion: say concise sentence with correct article usage.