Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kejelasan dengan membuat kalimat lebih singkat dan terstruktur. Gunakan bentuk jamak yang benar (buildings), hilangkan pengulangan (a lot of), dan tambahkan detail spesifik (mis. nama gedung atau fungsi) untuk memperkaya jawaban. Contoh perbaikan: mulai dengan satu kalimat topik, lalu satu kalimat pendukung menggunakan kata penghubung seperti 'for example' atau 'such as'.

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city center. For example, there is a large shopping mall and several office towers within a five-minute walk.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kosa kata untuk menyampaikan perubahan perasaan dengan jelas. Gunakan satu kalimat topik yang langsung menjawab (yes/no) lalu satu atau dua kalimat tambahan yang menjelaskan alasan dan contoh. Gunakan linking words seperti 'at first' dan 'now' untuk menunjukkan perubahan waktu.

예시: At first I did take photos because the buildings amazed me. However now I rarely take pictures because they seem ordinary and similar to each other.

제안: Jawab langsung dan ringkas: gunakan struktur yang jelas (topic + reason). Hindari pengulangan dan kesalahan frasa ('no short time building'). Tambahkan detail spesifik jika ada bangunan unik di dekatnya atau sebutkan tipe bangunan yang menarik untuk dikunjungi sebagai contoh.

예시: No, there isn't a particular building I want to visit because most nearby buildings are just commercial offices or shopping centers. If I had to choose, I would prefer to visit a historic church or museum instead.

제안: Perbaiki pilihan kata dan grammar: gunakan 'afraid of heights' bukan 'fear of hikes', dan susun jawaban menjadi dua kalimat: pendapat singkat lalu penjelasan spesifik tentang preferensi (lantai berapa dan alasan). Tambahkan linking word seperti 'because' untuk kejelasan alasan.

예시: Not really — I'm afraid of heights, so I prefer to live on a lower floor. I would be happy in a flat on the 5th or 6th floor, but I would avoid the very top floors.

× Well, yes, actually I live in the central area, so there are a lot of building, tall building here from school or a mall or just office, working space office that's there are a lot of tall building here.

✓ Well, yes, actually I live in the central area, so there are a lot of buildings, tall buildings here like schools, malls or office and workspaces; there are a lot of tall buildings here.

Penggunaan bentuk jamak diperlukan karena subjek merujuk ke banyak benda. Gunakan 'buildings' dan 'tall buildings' bukan bentuk tunggal. Selain itu ubah 'school or a mall' ke bentuk jamak konsisten 'schools, malls' dan gabungkan frasa untuk kejelasan. Suggestions: ubah kata benda yang jamak ke bentuk plural dengan menambahkan -s; pastikan konsistensi daftar (all plural or all singular with articles).

× When I first come here to the city, of course I felt amazed of this building, but along the time it just like the there is a common building, so it's just like nothing, nothing important.

✓ When I first came to the city, of course I was amazed by these buildings, but over time they just seemed common, so they felt like nothing important.

Kombinasi waktu salah: 'When I first come' harus past tense 'came' karena kejadian di masa lalu; 'felt amazed of' salah preposisi dan bentuk, gunakan 'was amazed by'; 'along the time' seharusnya 'over time'; subjek jamak 'buildings' cocok dengan 'they'. Suggestions: gunakan past tense untuk kejadian lampau, periksa preposisi yang benar (amazed by), dan cocokkan subjek-kata ganti.

× Well, actually there is no, non, no short time building that I would like to visit because the average building here is just the commercial building. So there is no special things about this building.

✓ Well, actually there are no short-term buildings that I would like to visit because the average building here is just commercial. So there is nothing special about these buildings.

Kesalahan 'there is' vs 'there are' karena jamak; 'no short time building' seharusnya 'no short-term buildings' (kata majemuk dan jamak); 'special things' lebih alami sebagai 'nothing special'; 'this building' perlu disesuaikan menjadi 'these buildings' untuk jamak. Suggestions: gunakan 'there are' untuk jamak, gunakan kata majemuk (short-term) dan gunakan 'nothing special'.

× Not really, I personally fear of hikes so it will be better for me to stay in the lower floor but I love to live in the flat that have about 10 floor but not in the highest floor just lower.

✓ Not really. I personally have a fear of heights, so it would be better for me to stay on a lower floor, but I would love to live in a flat that has about ten floors, just not on the highest floor—preferably lower.

Beberapa masalah: 'fear of hikes' salah kata (seharusnya 'fear of heights'); artikel dan preposisi: 'stay in the lower floor' seharusnya 'stay on a lower floor' dan gunakan artikel 'a'; 'flat that have' harus 'flat that has' (subject-verb agreement) dan '10 floor' harus plural 'ten floors'; 'the highest floor' tetap dengan artikel 'the'. Suggestions: koreksi kosakata (heights), gunakan preposisi yang benar untuk posisi (on a floor), perhatikan agreement antara subject dan verb, dan gunakan plural untuk jumlah lantai.