Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần chú ý ngữ pháp (số nhiều/số ít, động từ), trật tự từ và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Hãy rút gọn ý chính vào 1 câu chủ đề, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể với từ nối thích hợp (e.g., however, mostly). Tránh lỗi chính tả và dùng từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "homes" → "home", "task" không phù hợp).

예시: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. However, the area is not heavily built up; most of the tall structures are apartment blocks rather than office towers, which keeps the neighborhood relatively open.

제안: Cần cải thiện độ rõ ràng và chính xác ngữ pháp: chia động từ, số nhiều/số ít, và tránh lặp từ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn (Yes/No), dùng liên từ (e.g., but, however) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể (khi nào bạn chụp, ví dụ về tòa nhà và thời điểm).

예시: Not really — I don't usually photograph buildings. However, if a building has a unique design or looks impressive at night, I will quickly take a photo because I prefer capturing the moment rather than staging a perfect shot.

제안: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng tính từ chính xác (e.g., "the tallest"). Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, thêm vài chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và trải nghiệm mong muốn, và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Chú ý giới từ ("at the top"), mạo từ và chia động từ.

예시: Yes, I'd love to visit the Burj Khalifa one day because it is one of the tallest buildings in the world. Standing at the top and looking over the city would be an unforgettable experience, especially at sunset when the view is spectacular.

제안: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (gerund/infinitive, mạo từ, danh từ) và diễn đạt mạch lạc: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No), giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: view, yên tĩnh, tiện nghi), và tránh từ sai/ngớ ngẩn ("phone" không đúng).

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, preferably on a high floor, because the views would be amazing and it would be quieter away from street noise. Also, tall buildings often have convenient facilities like gyms and security.

× Yes, there are a few tall building in my homes but is not heavily built up area.

✓ Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home, but it is not a heavily built-up area.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'a few'. 'Homes' should be singular 'home' because speaker refers to their area generally. Missing subject 'it' before 'is' and need 'a' before 'heavily built-up area'. Combine phrases to form a grammatically correct sentence.

× Most of them are apartment blocks rather than office tower and personal I think is added modern task to neighborhoods without making them too crowded.

✓ Most of them are apartment blocks rather than office towers, and personally I think they add a modern touch to neighborhoods without making them too crowded.

Use plural 'office towers' to match 'most of them'. 'Personal' should be adverbial 'personally'. 'Is added modern task' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'they add a modern touch'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they add' rather than 'is added'.

× To be honest I don't usually take photo or buildings I choose for sake of each.

✓ To be honest, I don't usually take photos of buildings I choose for sightseeing.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' after 'usually'. Use preposition 'of' with 'photos of buildings'. The phrase 'for sake of each' is unclear; 'for sightseeing' or 'for their sake' is appropriate. Also add a comma after introductory phrase 'To be honest'.

× However, if the building has a unique unique design or look impression at night I will takes a quick photo because I more into the capturing moment than a captive.

✓ However, if a building has a unique design or looks impressive at night, I will take a quick photo because I am more into capturing moments than staging them.

Remove duplicate 'unique'. Use 'a building' rather than 'the building' for general statement. 'Look impression' should be 'looks impressive'. Use base form 'take' after 'will'. 'I more into' requires 'I am more into'. 'Capturing moment' should be plural 'capturing moments'. 'Than a captive' is wrong; 'than staging them' conveys intended contrast.

× Yes, I really like to visit Khalifa one day.

✓ Yes, I would really like to visit the Khalifa one day.

Use modal 'would' to express desire for a future visit politely. Add definite article 'the' before 'Khalifa' because it refers to a specific landmark (the Burj Khalifa).

× It's one of the most tallest building in the world and I find that's absolutely mind blowing.

✓ It's one of the tallest buildings in the world, and I find that absolutely mind-blowing.

Do not combine 'most' with 'tallest'; use 'one of the tallest'. Use plural 'buildings' after 'one of the'. Hyphenate 'mind-blowing' when used as adjective. Remove contraction 'that's' if clarity needed; here 'that' is correct without apostrophe.

× Standing the tops and seeing the cities can be unforgettable experience.

✓ Standing at the top and seeing the city can be an unforgettable experience.

Use preposition 'at' with 'the top'. 'Tops' should be singular 'top' in this context. 'Cities' should be singular 'city' to match viewpoint or use 'cities' with plural article. Add article 'an' before 'unforgettable experience'.

× I think I would like to living in the tallest building, especially high floor, I think is a quite big phone luxury and this view would be amazing being away from the noise of the streets.

✓ I think I would like to live in a tall building, especially on a high floor; I think it would be quite a luxury, and the view would be amazing, being away from the noise of the streets.

Use base verb 'live' after 'would like to'. Use 'on a high floor' for location. 'Is a quite big phone luxury' is garbled; correct to 'it would be quite a luxury'. Add punctuation for clarity and keep gerund phrase 'being away from the noise of the streets' as an added benefit.