Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also correct number expressions (e.g. 'four to five storeys') and plural forms.

예시: No, there are not many tall buildings near my home. My town is small and mostly residential, with most houses only four to five storeys high, so we rarely see skyscrapers.

제안: Answer directly and expand slightly with a specific reason or example. Remove hesitation markers. Use a linking word to add a detail (e.g. 'because' or 'for example').

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings because I like their architectural details. For example, I often photograph old churches and modern glass façades when they catch my eye.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide a specific example or reason. Fix grammar (singular/plural) and reduce repetition. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'instead' to clarify contrast.

예시: I don't have a particular building in mind; instead, I want to visit large cities with many skyscrapers. For example, I'd like to walk through downtown areas in New York or Dubai to compare different skyscraper designs.

제안: Provide a single clear opinion and one or two specific reasons. Combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking words like 'however' or 'because'. Avoid sentence fragments.

예시: I wouldn't want to live in a tall building; I prefer a small, cozy house because it feels more comfortable and homely. However, I would use tall buildings for work or conferences since they often have better facilities.

× I live in a very small town where umm there were not much of a big industries, hence most of the households have probably around 4:00 to 5:00 buildings and not more than that.

✓ I live in a very small town where there are not many big industries; hence most households probably have around four to five buildings and not more than that.

Errors: 'there were' uses past tense and is wrong for a general present fact (Present tense issue as well), 'not much of a big industries' mixes uncountable 'much' with plural 'industries' and uses unnecessary 'of a'. Use 'not many big industries'. 'most of the households have probably around 4:00 to 5:00 buildings' is awkward: 'most households probably have around four to five buildings' is clearer; avoid numeric time-like format '4:00' and use words for small numbers. Suggestion: use present tense 'there are' for current general facts and use 'many' with plural count nouns. Use clear number format and remove extraneous words.

× Hence we rarely see tall buildings and skyscrapers in my hometown.

✓ Hence we rarely see tall buildings and skyscrapers in my hometown.

This sentence is actually correct in tense and meaning. No grammatical change needed. Kept as present simple to describe a general truth. Note: maintain 'rarely see' for frequency adverb placement before main verb.

× Yes, I do like to take pictures of the buildings if I found them, uh, beautiful.

✓ Yes, I do like to take pictures of buildings if I find them beautiful.

Error: 'if I found them' incorrectly uses past tense 'found' after 'do like' and with a conditional meaning; the correct form is simple present 'find' for habitual or general conditions. Also 'of the buildings' is better as 'of buildings' (general). Suggestion: use present simple for general habits and omit extra words like 'uh'.

× There is no specific building in mind that I want to visit now, but I do want to visit a big cities and towns which have tall buildings and skyscrapers.

✓ There is no specific building in mind that I want to visit now, but I do want to visit big cities and towns that have tall buildings and skyscrapers.

Errors: 'a big cities and towns' mixes singular article 'a' with plural nouns 'cities and towns'. Remove the article and use plural 'big cities and towns'. Also 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses. Suggestion: match article and noun number and use 'that' for defining clauses.

× I just want to see them in a in lots of different buildings and not just one.

✓ I just want to see them in lots of different buildings, not just one.

Errors: extra 'a in' is redundant and ungrammatical. The phrase should be 'in lots of different buildings'. Also punctuation: a comma before 'not just one' improves clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and keep concise structure.

× I would only prefer tall building for work, conferences or meetings.

✓ I would only prefer a tall building for work, conferences, or meetings.

Errors: missing article before singular count noun 'tall building' — use 'a tall building'. Also pluralization: 'work, conferences, or meetings' is fine; include commas. 'Would prefer' is acceptable modal use. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns.

× For my own home. I rather live in a small cozy house because it feels more comfortable and homely.

✓ For my own home, I would rather live in a small, cozy house because it feels more comfortable and homely.

Errors: sentence fragment 'For my own home.' should be joined to the main clause. 'I rather live' is nonstandard; use 'I would rather live' or 'I'd rather live'. Also add comma between adjectives 'small, cozy'. Suggestion: avoid fragments, use conditional/modal 'would rather' for preferences, and punctuate adjective lists.