Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and plural errors.

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a densely populated area. For example, a few residential towers and office blocks are within walking distance, which gives the neighborhood a lively atmosphere.

제안: Use a clear structure: state whether you take photos, then give a specific reason and one short example. Correct repetition and verb forms, and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I want to remember interesting designs. For example, I recently photographed a historic mosque with intricate patterns to study its architecture later.

제안: Answer directly, correct tense and word choice, and give one specific reason and detail. Use linking phrases like "because" and avoid filler words (uh, um).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Taj Mahal in Agra because I have heard a lot about its extraordinary architecture and history. If I get the chance, I would spend a day studying its marble inlay work and taking photographs.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then two concise supporting reasons with correct vocabulary and grammar. Replace filler and unclear phrases with precise words (e.g., "cramped" instead of "suffocation"). Use linking words like "because" and "also."

예시: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer open spaces and fresh air. Also, tall apartments can feel cramped and lack outdoor areas like a garden or balcony.

× Yes, I live in a very crowded places so there are different kinds of tall buildings and I like the atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I live in a very crowded place, so there are different kinds of tall buildings and I like the atmosphere.

The noun 'places' is plural but the determiner 'a' requires a singular noun. Change 'places' to 'place'. Also add a comma to separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, whenever I see beautiful buildings and tall buildings that that you may click the photos because I want to Remember Remember the visiting there.

✓ Yes, whenever I see beautiful or tall buildings, I may take photos because I want to remember visiting them.

Problems include redundant words ('that that', 'Remember Remember'), incorrect verb collocation ('click the photos' is informal—use 'take photos'), and incorrect object phrasing ('the visiting there' should be 'visiting them'). Use present simple 'I may take' to express habitual action and correct pronoun 'them' for buildings.

× Yes, in future, I really want to visit Agra because I listen a lot of things about the structure of uh, uh, build that building. In future, if I got a chance, then I will definitely uh, go there.

✓ Yes, in the future I really want to visit Agra because I have heard a lot about the structure of that building. If I get a chance in the future, I will definitely go there.

Use present perfect 'have heard' to refer to experiences up to now rather than simple past 'listen'. 'Build that building' is incorrect; use 'that building' or 'the building'. For the conditional, use present simple 'if I get a chance' not past 'if I got a chance' when referring to a real future possibility.

× Well, I don't like to live in a tall building because the, uh, because I like to live at that kind of places where are fully open. And on the other hand, tall buildings are have AI feel suffocation or a limited space.

✓ Well, I don't like living in a tall building because I like to live in places that are fully open. On the other hand, tall buildings can feel suffocating or have limited space.

Use 'living in' for general preferences. 'At that kind of places' is wrong: use 'in places' and 'that are' instead of 'where are'. 'Are have AI feel suffocation' is ungrammatical; correct to 'can feel suffocating' or 'feel suffocated' and 'have limited space'. Also remove filler words and improve coherence.