Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct common grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation words (uh, um) and incorrect plural forms (a lot, metropolitan).

예시: Yes. There are many tall apartment buildings near my home. I live on the outskirts of the city, so it is less busy than the CBD, but there are still several high-rise residential blocks within walking distance.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then add a specific example with linking words. Improve grammar (e.g., 'only if', 'the other day', 'at sunset') and simplify phrasing. Use present tense for habits and past tense for specific events consistently.

예시: Yes, but only when a building looks particularly attractive. For example, the other day I visited the CBD and saw several new skyscrapers; at sunset the lighting made their glass facades glow, so I took several photos.

제안: Answer directly and provide one clear, specific reason with linking words. Correct vocabulary (cultural heritage, CBD, century-old, barrack-style or 'baroque-style' if intended) and avoid repetition. Describe one architectural detail to be more vivid.

예시: Yes. There is a cultural heritage building in the CBD I would like to visit because it is over a century old. Its baroque-style façade has intricate stone carvings and arched windows, which I find fascinating.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid self-deprecating phrasing and grammatical errors. Use correct expressions (I used to dream of living; I don't want to wait for the lift; ground-floor apartment).

예시: I wouldn't want to live in a tall building anymore. I used to, but now I prefer a ground-floor apartment because I dislike waiting for lifts, especially when there are long queues, and I find stairs or direct access more convenient.

× Yes, there are quite a lots of tall buildings near my apartments.

✓ Yes, there are quite a lot of tall buildings near my apartment.

You used 'a lots' and 'apartments' incorrectly. 'A lot' is the correct expression for a large quantity (no 's' after 'a'), and 'apartment' should be singular when referring to the one you live in. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' for uncountable/collective quantity and match singular/plural to the noun.'

× Uh, the I'm living, currently living in the, uh, in the outskirts of the metropolitans.

✓ I'm currently living in the outskirts of the metropolis.

The original is disfluent and contains incorrect article and noun form 'the metropolitans'. Use 'I'm currently living' for present continuous and 'the outskirts of the metropolis' or 'the outskirts of the city'. Remove extra fillers and unnecessary 'the'.'

× So it is not like a bustling acid CBD, but it's definitely, uh, accommodates a lots of, uh, tall buildings, apartments, so many residency nearby.

✓ So it is not like a bustling CBD, but it definitely accommodates a lot of tall apartment buildings and many residences nearby.

Several issues: 'acid' is incorrect word choice; likely you meant nothing there so remove it. 'Accommodates' must have a subject 'it' and should be followed by appropriate objects: 'a lot of' (not 'a lots') and 'apartment buildings' is clearer. 'Residency' is a noun for the state of residing; use 'residences' for dwellings. Keep consistent plural forms.'

× I think I do only if the building is really beautiful and stunning.

✓ I think I only do if the building is really beautiful and stunning.

Placement of 'only' is awkward. Put 'only' before the verb it modifies: 'I only do' or better 'I only take photos if the building is really beautiful and stunning.' Suggest adding the verb 'take photos' to clarify the action.'

× I went to the CBD centers the other days and I saw a lot of new tall buildings and towers, skyscrapers.

✓ I went to the CBD the other day and saw a lot of new tall buildings and skyscrapers.

Use singular 'the other day' (not 'days') for a recent unspecified single time. 'CBD centers' is redundant; 'CBD' suffices. Also streamline word order: 'saw a lot of new tall buildings and skyscrapers.'

× They are absolutely beautiful especially in the sun setting moment.

✓ They are absolutely beautiful, especially at sunset.

Use the prepositional phrase 'at sunset' or 'during sunset' instead of 'in the sun setting moment.' 'At sunset' is natural and concise.'

× The lighting to give the towers really amazing so I take photos.

✓ The lighting makes the towers look really amazing, so I take photos.

The verb phrase is incorrect: use 'makes' (present tense) and 'look' to describe appearance. The original uses infinitive 'to give' incorrectly. Also add comma before 'so' to join clauses.'

× Yes. I think there are a couple of buildings in the CBDS I really want to visit because it's a culture heritage building, which means it's more than 100 years old and it is, it's like a barrack style, very beautiful details in that architecture.

✓ Yes. I think there are a couple of buildings in the CBD that I really want to visit because they're cultural heritage buildings, which means they are more than 100 years old and have a barrack-style design with very beautiful architectural details.

Multiple errors: 'CBDS' should be 'CBD' (no plural). 'It's a culture heritage building' should be 'they're cultural heritage buildings' to agree with 'a couple of buildings'. Use 'cultural' (adjective) instead of 'culture'. 'Barrack style' should be 'barrack-style' (hyphen) and 'details in that architecture' should be 'architectural details.' Ensure plural agreement.'

× I used to dream living in a tall building, but not anymore.

✓ I used to dream of living in a tall building, but not anymore.

The verb pattern is 'dream of doing' or 'dream about doing', so use 'dream of living' rather than 'dream living.' The rest is fine.'

× I don't think the tall building is for the people like me because I'm kind of a very, very lazy.

✓ I don't think tall buildings are for people like me because I'm kind of very lazy.

Use plural 'tall buildings' when speaking generally. Remove redundant article 'the' and extra 'a' before 'very, very lazy' — 'lazy' is an adjective describing you; say 'I'm kind of very lazy' or better 'I'm quite lazy.' Avoid double degree words.'

× I don't want you to wait for the the lift.

✓ I don't want to wait for the lift.

You used 'you' incorrectly — the speaker should refer to themselves: 'I don't want to wait.' Also remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'the lift' or 'the elevator' if specific.'

× And sometimes it's take a long time because of the long queues over there.

✓ And sometimes it takes a long time because of the long queues there.

Use the third-person singular present 'it takes' (subject-verb agreement). Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'long queues' when speaking generally or keep if referring to specific queues; 'there' is sufficient without 'over.'

× And I'll prefer living like a ground floor, which is very.

✓ And I'd prefer living on the ground floor, which is much more convenient.

Use 'prefer' with base form: 'I'd prefer' or 'I prefer.' Use preposition 'on the ground floor' not 'like a ground floor.' The trailing 'which is very.' is incomplete; complete the thought, e.g., 'which is much more convenient.'