Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun/verb forms, and avoid wrong words (e.g. 'query', 'high risk'). Add one specific detail and a linking phrase. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, several new residential blocks and office towers are currently under construction within a ten-minute walk. As Cambodia is developing rapidly, these projects are changing the skyline and attracting more businesses to the area.

제안: Work on sentence structure, verb forms and vocabulary. Give one clear reason with a linking word and correct repetitive phrases. Use concrete details and keep it concise.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer to enjoy the view from my balcony. For instance, the buildings near my house are beautifully lit at night, so I often sit with a cup of tea and a book to relax while watching the lights.

제안: Clarify descriptions and correct word choices. Begin with a direct statement, then give specific visual details using correct nouns (e.g. 'shape', 'interior', 'interior design'). Mention purpose for visiting with a linking word.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Fountain Building near my house because its shape resembles a dolphin and its exterior has intricate sculptural details. I want to go inside to see the interior design and take photos to study its architectural features.

제안: Use correct tense and collocations, start with a clear topic sentence and then contrast with a linking word (e.g. 'however'). Be specific about reasons and keep sentences concise.

예시: I used to think living in a tall building would be exciting because of the impressive views. However, now I prefer a house in a green area because I enjoy outdoor space and being close to nature, which helps me relax and feel happier.

× Yes, there are many tall building near my home because I'm live in the city.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'many'. Also 'I'm live' is incorrect verb form; use 'I live'. Use simple present for habitual facts. Suggestion: use plural nouns after quantifiers like 'many' and use correct present tense: 'I live'.

× Cambodia is a developing query so I can see a several high risk residential building and office tower under construction close to my house.

✓ Cambodia is a developing country so I can see several high-risk residential buildings and office towers under construction close to my house.

Several errors: 'query' should be 'country' (word choice), 'a several' is ungrammatical; use 'several' without 'a'. 'high risk' as a compound adjective before a noun needs a hyphen: 'high-risk'. Nouns 'residential building' and 'office tower' should be plural to match 'several'. Present simple 'I can see' is fine. Suggestion: correct word choice and plurality and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× No, I do not usually take a photo as a building.

✓ No, I do not usually take photos of buildings.

Use plural 'photos' and the correct preposition 'of' rather than 'as'. The original 'as a building' is incorrect for meaning. Use simple present negative for habitual action. Suggestion: say 'take photos of buildings'.

× I prefer to enjoy the view from my bell corner because the building near my house are beautifully and illuminated at night and night.

✓ I prefer to enjoy the view from my balcony corner because the buildings near my house are beautiful and illuminated at night.

Multiple issues: 'bell corner' likely intended 'balcony corner' (word choice). 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'near my house'. 'are beautifully' uses adverb instead of adjective; should be 'are beautiful'. Duplicate 'at night and night' is redundant; use once. 'illuminated' is correct adjective. Suggestion: choose correct noun, match plural, use adjectives after 'are'.

× The whole thing feel very beautiful.

✓ The whole scene feels very beautiful.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'scene' or 'thing' requires 'feels' (third person singular). 'The whole thing' is awkward; 'the whole scene' or 'it' is better. Suggestion: use 'feels' with singular subject and choose a more natural noun.

× Sometime I just sit with a cup of tea, bring a book to relaxing.

✓ Sometimes I just sit with a cup of tea and bring a book to relax.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' for frequency. 'bring a book to relaxing' mixes forms; use infinitive 'to relax' or gerund 'for relaxing' but 'to relax' is natural. Also connect actions with 'and'. Suggestion: use adverb 'sometimes' and 'to relax'.

× Yes, there is a building near my house called the Fountain Building that I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, there is a building near my house called the Fountain Building that I would like to visit.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'There is' properly introduces a singular building. No change needed.

× It's interesting, ship look like a dolphin and the interrupt has intricate detail that I find fantastic.

✓ It's interesting: the shape looks like a dolphin and the exterior has intricate details that I find fantastic.

Multiple word choice and grammar errors: 'ship' likely meant 'shape'; 'look' should be 'looks' (third person singular). 'interrupt' is incorrect; 'exterior' fits context. Use plural 'details'. Also punctuation: replace comma with colon or split into sentences. Suggestion: use correct nouns and third-person singular verbs and plural for countable nouns.

× I would love to go inside and see the Internet design and take some photos to learn about this architecture.

✓ I would love to go inside and see the interior design and take some photos to learn about the architecture.

'Internet design' is incorrect; should be 'interior design'. Also 'this architecture' is awkward; 'the architecture' is better. The rest is fine. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary: 'interior design' and 'the architecture'.

× When I was young, I thought living in a tall building would be excited because it looked impressive and authentic views.

✓ When I was young, I thought living in a tall building would be exciting because it looked impressive and offered authentic views.

'Excited' is an adjective describing feeling; 'exciting' describes something that causes excitement, so use 'exciting'. Also add a verb for 'views': 'offered authentic views' to make the clause complete. Suggestion: use 'exciting' for things and include a verb for what the building provided.

× However, now I would prefer a house in the green areas because I enjoy having more outdoor space and very close to natural which make me feel more relaxing and happy the most.

✓ However, now I would prefer a house in a green area because I enjoy having more outdoor space and being very close to nature, which makes me feel more relaxed and happy.

Several issues: 'the green areas' -> 'a green area' or 'green areas'; 'very close to natural' should be 'very close to nature'. Need gerund 'being' to connect 'very close to nature'. Relative clause 'which makes' needs singular verb to agree with preceding noun phrase. 'relaxing' (causing relaxation) should be 'relaxed' (feeling). Remove 'the most' which is redundant. Suggestion: use 'being close to nature', correct verb agreement, and use 'relaxed'.