Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar/wording errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example with correct phrasing and linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "near my home and around my university" is fine but don't repeat the idea).

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings close to my home and around my university because urban construction standards and technology have improved. For example, in the last few years multiple high‑rise apartment blocks and office towers have been built nearby.

제안: Good direct answer with a clear reason and example. Improve by using a linking phrase to connect reason and consequence and choose precise singular/plural agreement ("its distinctive design" for a singular building). Add a brief personal detail to make it more specific.

예시: Sometimes. I photograph buildings with unusual architecture, such as the Art Museum in Chongqing, because its distinctive design makes a memorable keepsake and showcases impressive construction techniques. I especially like capturing unusual façades to study design details later.

제안: Avoid repetition and correct minor grammar (remove duplicate "because"). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or details. Mention a time or plan to make it more personal.

예시: Yes. I'd like to visit the provincial library because it is a massive modern building that houses thousands of books. I think it would be an ideal place to study due to its quiet atmosphere and comfortable reading areas, so I plan to go there next month.

제안: Reduce repetition and correct grammar (use past tense consistently and correct infinitive forms). Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like "I would I would".

예시: Yes, I would. I have lived in high‑rise apartments in China, where most people live in tall blocks. Because elevators are common, reaching upper floors is easy, and I appreciate the views and convenience of such buildings.

× For example, several high rise apartment blocks and we can see off office towers near my home have been built in the last few years.

✓ For example, several high-rise apartment blocks and office towers near my home have been built in the last few years.

The original sentence has extra words ('we can see off') that disrupt sentence structure and meaning. Also 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Remove the unnecessary phrase and join the compound adjective correctly to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure by listing nouns (apartment blocks and office towers) without inserting clauses that break the flow.

× I do this because their distinctive design makes a memorable keepsake and reflects impressive construction techniques.

✓ I do this because their distinctive designs create a memorable keepsake and reflect impressive construction techniques.

The original mixes singular/plural agreement and verb choice. 'Design' should match plural 'their' so use 'designs'. 'Makes a memorable keepsake' is awkward because 'designs' (plural) should take a plural verb; also 'create a memorable keepsake' fits better. Additionally, 'reflects' should be 'reflect' to agree with plural subject 'designs'. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number and choose verbs that collocate naturally with 'design' (e.g., 'create' and 'reflect').

× One building I'd like to visit is the library in my province. It's a massive modern library that houses thousands of books, and I think it will be a perfect place to study because because of its quiet atmosphere and comfortable reading areas.

✓ One building I'd like to visit is the library in my province. It's a massive modern library that houses thousands of books, and I think it will be a perfect place to study because of its quiet atmosphere and comfortable reading areas.

There is a repeated word 'because because' which is a typographical/redundancy error causing sentence disruption (sentence structure issue). Removing the duplicate yields a grammatically correct sentence. Also tense and wording are appropriate for the context. Suggestion: Proofread to remove duplicated words and ensure smooth flow.

× I've also lived in the top apartment buildings in China because most people here live in high rise blocks.

✓ I've also lived in some of the taller apartment buildings in China because most people here live in high-rise blocks.

'Top apartment buildings' is unclear; 'taller' or 'some of the taller' is more natural. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective. The present perfect 'I've also lived' is acceptable, but improving adjective choice clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Choose clearer comparative adjectives and use hyphens for compound adjectives before nouns.

× Nowadays elevators are common so get into the upper floors isn't a challenge for me.

✓ Nowadays elevators are common, so getting to the upper floors isn't a challenge for me.

The original incorrectly uses the infinitive 'get' and an incorrect preposition 'into' with 'floors' causing sentence structure errors. Use the gerund 'getting' after 'so' to form a noun phrase as the subject of 'isn't a challenge', and use 'to the upper floors' rather than 'into'. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'getting to' when describing reaching floors and ensure the verb form functions as a noun phrase when needed.

× So I think I would I would like to live in a tall building.

✓ So I think I would like to live in a tall building.

The sentence repeats 'I would' twice, which is a redundancy causing a sentence structure error. Remove the duplicate to produce a fluent, grammatically correct sentence. Suggestion: Read sentences aloud or proofread to catch accidental repetitions.