Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more precise and natural: start with a direct answer, avoid contradictions (a phone tower is unlikely a supermarket), limit to 2–4 sentences, and add a specific detail. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home. For example, a multi-storey shopping complex close by is the tallest in the area; I often buy groceries there and I also take dance classes in a studio on the third floor.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence, then a clear reason and a specific example. Reduce repetition and use linking words (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel because they show local history and style. For example, last year in Shanghai I photographed several colonial-era facades to remember their unique details and to compare them with buildings at home.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and an example of what you would like to see. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'artifacts', 'architecture') and linking words to organize ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum because it houses ancient artifacts and imperial architecture. For instance, I want to see the royal court rooms and porcelain collections to learn about historical life and broaden my understanding of Chinese history.

제안: Start with a clear short answer, then give specific reasons without vague phrasing. Replace awkward expressions (e.g., 'things under my ground') with clear descriptions like 'heights' or 'falling'. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words (however, because).

예시: Not really — I don't like living in tall buildings because I get anxious about heights. Instead, I prefer a low-rise home where I feel safer and it's easier to go outside and use the garden.

× Of course. Yes, there is the phone tower near my home.

✓ Of course. Yes, there is a phone tower near my home.

Use of the definite article 'the' implies a specific known phone tower; in this context the speaker should use the indefinite article 'a' to introduce one such tower near their home. Also 'there is' is correct for existence of a singular noun, so change 'the' to 'a' to be natural. Suggestion: use 'a' when mentioning something for the first time or when it is not uniquely identified.

× It's the tallest building in Nanjing and it's also a supermarket.

✓ It's the tallest building in Nanjing, and it's also a supermarket.

Two independent clauses joined by 'and' require a comma before the conjunction for correct punctuation in written English. This improves clarity. Suggestion: place a comma before 'and' when connecting full clauses.

× I can buy a lot of things in it and I have dancing lessons in it.

✓ I can buy a lot of things there, and I have dancing lessons there.

Using 'in it' to refer to a building is awkward; 'there' or 'in it' can both be grammatical, but repeating 'in it' is unnatural. Replacing with 'there' improves fluency. Also add a comma before 'and' connecting independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'there' to refer back to a place already mentioned and avoid repeating 'in it'.

× Of course, yes, especially I go abroad or I go to another city because I can see the different views, different cultures from my city when I go back to the home, and I can also remember the good memory of it.

✓ Of course. Especially when I go abroad or to another city, I take photos because I can see different views and cultures compared with my city when I return home, and I can also remember the good memories.

Multiple issues: sentence structure is awkward and word choice errors. 'Especially I go abroad or I go to another city' should be rephrased to 'especially when I go abroad or to another city' to introduce a time clause. 'Different views, different cultures from my city' should be 'different views and cultures compared with my city.' 'When I go back to the home' is incorrect; use 'when I return home.' 'I can also remember the good memory of it' should be plural 'good memories' and omit 'of it'. Suggestions: use time clauses with 'when', use 'return home' for natural phrasing, and use plural 'memories' for generally recalling experiences.

× because I can see different views and different cultures of ancient people, and I can also learn a lot of knowledge from it.

✓ because I can see the different views and cultures of ancient people, and I can also learn a lot from it.

'Different cultures of ancient people' is understandable but awkward; add 'the' for specificity: 'the different views and cultures of ancient people.' 'Learn a lot of knowledge' is redundant; better 'learn a lot' or 'gain a lot of knowledge.' Suggestion: use 'learn a lot' or 'gain knowledge' to sound natural.

× It can also broaden my horizon.

✓ It can also broaden my horizons.

The English idiom is 'broaden my horizons' (plural). Using the singular 'horizon' is less idiomatic. Suggestion: use 'horizons' to refer to expanding one's experience or perspective.

× Not really, because when I stand in the tall building I feel very afraid of the things under my ground.

✓ Not really, because when I stand in a tall building, I feel very afraid of the things below me.

Problems: definite article 'the tall building' should be 'a tall building' when speaking generally. 'Under my ground' is incorrect and unnatural; use 'below me'. Also add a comma after the clause and 'a tall building' fits generic reference. Suggestion: use 'below me' or 'underneath me' to describe being afraid of heights.

× Instead I like living the a short building because I can do everything freely.

✓ Instead, I prefer living in a short building because I can do everything freely.

Multiple errors: 'living the a short building' has a stray 'the' and misses preposition 'in'. Use 'prefer' instead of 'like' for contrast with 'Not really' to sound more natural, though 'I like living in a short building' is acceptable. Also add a comma after 'Instead'. Suggestion: use 'living in a short building' and remove the extra 'the'.