Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and unrelated statements (e.g., general judgments about suitability) that do not describe the buildings. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. There are many tall residential and office buildings near my home in Zhejiang Province. For example, two new apartment towers and a business complex were built last year, which changed the skyline and provided more shops and services nearby.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer taking photos of buildings" not "to taking"). Remove hesitations and be specific about what kinds of building features you photograph and why. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes. I usually photograph buildings with distinctive local features because they reflect the city's culture. For example, when I visited Hangzhou I took pictures of traditional pagodas and modern glass facades to compare architectural styles.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give concise, specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like "most, the latest and fashion style" and remove hesitations. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

예시: Yes. I usually try to visit the local museum whenever I travel because museums often showcase local history and art. For example, in Suzhou the museum displayed traditional silk embroidery that helped me understand the city's cultural heritage.

제안: Be direct and avoid confusion. Decide whether your answer is yes or no, then give clear, specific reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., "represents that I have a good standard of living") and avoid contradictory statements in the same answer. Use linking words like "however" if you want to present a contrast (e.g., desire vs affordability).

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it usually offers good facilities and a nice view. However, I can't afford the high rent right now, so I hope to move into one in the future when my income improves.

× I live in a small city in the Zhejiang province actually.

✓ I live in a small city in Zhejiang province, actually.

Use of the definite article 'the' with most province names is unnecessary in English. 'Zhejiang province' is treated as a proper noun without 'the'. Also comma improves natural speech rhythm.

× As for me, and my hometown is very suitable for people to live in, because the economy of my hometown is very good.

✓ As for me, my hometown is very suitable for people to live in because its economy is good.

The original contains an extraneous 'and' creating a sentence fragment and repetition of 'my hometown'. Remove 'and' and combine clauses; replace repeated noun with the possessive pronoun 'its' for conciseness and correct structure.

× When I go, uh travel to other cities, I prefer to taking photos of meetings, uh, which has local, local features yes.

✓ When I travel to other cities, I prefer taking photos of buildings that have local features.

After 'prefer' use the gerund form without 'to' (prefer taking). 'To taking' is incorrect. 'Meetings' seems wrong in context; 'buildings' fits the topic. Use plural agreement 'have' to match plural 'buildings' and remove filler words.

× I think that would help me to learn some special culture and, uh.

✓ I think that would help me learn about local culture.

Use 'help me learn' rather than 'help me to learn' (both are possible but shorter form is natural). 'Some special culture' is awkward; 'local culture' is clearer and more natural. Remove filler 'uh'.

× To be more specific, every time I travel to a new city, I'd like to go to the local museum to have a visit, uh, because I think, uh, each museum could represent the most, the latest and uh, fashion style of the city.

✓ To be more specific, every time I travel to a new city, I'd like to visit the local museum because I think each museum can represent the latest fashion and style of the city.

Use 'visit' instead of the clumsy 'to have a visit'. 'Could' implies uncertainty; 'can' is more natural here. 'The most, the latest and fashion style' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'the latest fashion and style'.

× It was very beautiful.

✓ They are often very beautiful.

The original 'It was very beautiful' mismatches number and generality: museums in multiple cities are referenced, so plural 'they' is appropriate and present tense expresses a habitual truth. Use plural and present habitual tense.

× Yes, I do speakers.

✓ Yes, I do.

'Speakers' is an extraneous word that makes the sentence ungrammatical. The short answer 'Yes, I do' correctly responds to 'Do you want to live in a tall building?'. Remove the extra word.

× As for me, I think living in a tall building can represent I have a good quality of, uh, my own life.

✓ As for me, I think living in a tall building can show that I have a good quality of life.

Original mixes structures ('can represent I have') which is ungrammatical. Use 'show that' or 'indicate that' followed by a clause. 'A good quality of my own life' is awkward; standard phrase is 'a good quality of life'.

× I can't afford the the lease and I can be responsible to.

✓ I can't afford the lease and I am not able to take responsibility for it.

Original has repetition 'the the' and an incomplete clause 'I can be responsible to' which lacks an object. Use 'afford the lease' and 'take responsibility for it' to complete meaning. Depending on intended meaning, 'I can't afford the lease or be responsible for it' may also work.