Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 자연스러운 표현을 고쳐야 합니다. 주어와 동사의 일치를 확인하고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘I living’은 ‘I live’로 고쳐야 하며, ‘low and small’은 중복되므로 하나의 형용사로 바꾸거나 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 간결한 주제문을 제시한 뒤, 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항으로 보완하세요.

예시: I live in a small town, so there aren’t any tall buildings nearby. Most of the houses are low-rise, usually one or two stories, and the skyline is mostly trees and small shops.

제안: 답변 구조는 괜찮지만 말을 더 자연스럽고 응집력 있게 만들 필요가 있습니다. 'Umm' 같은 채우기 말은 줄이고, 이유와 구체적인 예를 한 문장으로 연결하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 흐름을 좋게 하세요.

예시: Not really — I usually prefer photographing nature. For example, I often take landscape shots and night photos of the stars because I find natural scenes more peaceful and visually interesting.

제안: 좀 더 자연스럽고 정확한 표현으로 바꾸세요. 'If I have a chance'보다 'If I had the chance' 또는 'I'd like to visit'로 시작하고, 방문 이유와 기대하는 경험을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 장소에 관한 구체적 정보(층수, 전망대 등)를 추가하면 좋습니다.

예시: If I had the chance, I’d like to visit the 63 Building in Seoul. It’s a well-known landmark and I’d love to go up to the observation deck to enjoy panoramic views of the city and the Han River.

제안: 반복과 문법 오류를 줄이고 한두 문장으로 명확하게 말하세요. 'city view' 대신 'the city view' 혹은 'city views'를 사용하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 편의시설, 전망, 접근성). 또한 연결사를 활용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

예시: Definitely — I’d love to live in a tall building because it offers great city views. Besides the scenery, living high up often means better access to amenities and less street noise, which I find appealing.

× I living in a small town so there aren't any tall buildings nearby.

✓ I live in a small town so there aren't any tall buildings nearby.

The sentence uses 'I living' which is incorrect because the simple present requires the base form of the verb after the subject. Use 'I live' to state a habitual or current fact. Suggestion: use subject + base verb for present simple (I live, you work, he goes).

× Most of the structures here are low and small.

✓ Most of the structures here are low and small.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'low and small' sounds slightly awkward; better collocations are 'low-rise' or 'short' and 'small' describes size. Suggestion: use 'low-rise and small' or 'short and small' for more natural phrasing.

× Not really. I don't usually take photographs of buildings.

✓ Not really. I don't usually take photographs of buildings.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no change needed. Explanation: 'don't usually' correctly expresses habitual negative action.

× I prefer photographing nature.

✓ I prefer photographing nature.

This sentence is acceptable; 'prefer photographing' correctly uses the verb + -ing after 'prefer'. No change needed.

× Umm, like landscapes for example.

✓ I mean, landscapes, for example.

The fragment 'Umm, like landscapes for example.' is colloquial and incomplete. Use a fuller phrase such as 'I mean, landscapes, for example.' to make it a complete and clearer utterance.

× I love capturing stars.

✓ I love capturing stars.

This sentence is correct in present simple to state a general preference; no change needed.

× Umm, If I have a chance, I want to visit the 63 building.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to visit the 63 Building.

The original mixes a real conditional with a wish. Use the second conditional for hypothetical situations: 'If I had the chance' + 'I would like' to express a desire to visit. Also capitalize 'Building' as part of the proper name.

× It's a famous landmark in Seoul.

✓ It's a famous landmark in Seoul.

This sentence is correct; the article 'a' is used properly before 'famous landmark'. No change needed.

× I'd like to watch the city view in there.

✓ I'd like to see the city view from there.

Use 'see' rather than 'watch' for views and use the preposition 'from' to indicate viewpoint. 'In there' is incorrect here; 'from there' correctly indicates location where the view is seen.

× Definitely yes. I want to live in a tall building because I love city view.

✓ Definitely. I want to live in a tall building because I love the city view.

Replace 'Definitely yes' with 'Definitely' for natural speech. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'city view' because it refers to a specific view (the view of the city).

× So if I have a chance to live in a tall building, I want to see the view of city.

✓ So if I have a chance to live in a tall building, I want to see the view of the city.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'city' to form 'the city' because a specific city is implied. The conditional 'if I have a chance' is acceptable in spoken context; no further tense change required.