Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tự nhiên và ngắn gọn hơn. Tránh tiếng lắp (uh, umm) và từ sai ("sky rappers"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về vị trí hoặc khoảng cách. Sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village about 50 kilometers from Ho Chi Minh City, so the skyline is mostly low houses and trees rather than skyscrapers.

제안: Cần dùng ngôn ngữ chính xác và tránh cấu trúc mâu thuẫn. Tránh từ không đúng nghĩa ("unconscious", "syndrome"). Nên nói rõ loại ảnh bạn chụp thay thế và lý do một cách ngắn gọn. Dùng 2–3 câu tối đa, có liên từ để liên kết ý.

예시: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings. I prefer photographing quiet natural scenes or people because busy streets make me uncomfortable.

제안: Cần cụ thể hơn và dùng tên chính xác (ví dụ: the Eiffel Tower). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng lắp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể (kiến trúc, tầm nhìn, văn hoá). Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I’m interested in its architecture and I would love to see the city view from the top and take some photos in the nearby squares.

제안: Trả lời nên trực tiếp và mạch lạc. Tránh lắp và cụm từ mơ hồ ("slow peak of people"). Nêu lý do cụ thể như không gian yên tĩnh, gần gũi thiên nhiên, cộng đồng thân thiện. Giữ 2 câu tối đa.

예시: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building. I prefer the peaceful countryside because it’s quieter and closer to nature, which makes me feel more relaxed and connected to my community.

× Absolutely no uh, currently I am living in a village which is so far from large metropolises like Ho Chi Minh City and uh, rarely there's the time for me to enjoy sky rappers.

✓ No, currently I am living in a village which is far from large metropolises like Ho Chi Minh City, and I rarely have the opportunity to enjoy skyscrapers.

The student omitted or misused articles and produced awkward phrasing. Use 'No' instead of 'Absolutely no' for a natural response. 'A village' is correct as an indefinite singular noun; 'large metropolises' is fine but 'far from' is the correct collocation. 'Rarely there's the time' is incorrect word order and verb choice; change to 'I rarely have the opportunity' for correct subject-verb order and meaning. 'Sky rappers' is a mispronunciation; correct word is 'skyscrapers'.

× Absolutely no. Taking photos of buildings is not my interest.

✓ No. Taking photos of buildings is not my interest.

The main issue is register and awkwardness rather than a strict modal error; however 'is not my interest' is grammatically acceptable but unusual. Better: 'No. Taking photos of buildings is not my interest' or 'No. I am not interested in taking photos of buildings.' Change improves naturalness and subject-verb clarity. (Advice: use 'I am not interested in ...' to express personal preference.)

× I hate the noisy and unconscious atmosphere on the street or buildings.

✓ I dislike the noisy and impersonal atmosphere on the street or in buildings.

'Hate' is strong but acceptable; the real issue is word choice: 'unconscious atmosphere' is incorrect; likely meant 'impersonal' or 'unconscious' is wrong. Use 'in buildings' for correct preposition. 'Dislike' is softer than 'hate' if preferred. Adjust adjective to match intended meaning.

× Instead of that I often capture moment through syndrome.

✓ Instead, I often capture moments through photography.

The sentence is ungrammatical and uses incorrect nouns: 'capture moment' needs plural or article ('capture moments' or 'capture a moment') and 'through syndrome' is incorrect word choice; likely 'through photography' or 'through my camera'. Fix word order and choose correct noun.

× Well, umm, a building that, uh, is thrilling, I'd like to visit in the near future is absolutely, uh, tower in Paris.

✓ Well, a building that I would like to visit in the near future is the tower in Paris.

Sentence structure is disfluent and missing articles. Remove filler words, place the relative clause correctly: 'a building that I would like to visit' and use 'the tower in Paris' (or 'the Eiffel Tower') with the definite article. 'Absolutely' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× I think, umm, a lot of beautiful square in the foreign country for me to captivate the moment of the end.

✓ I think there are a lot of beautiful squares in foreign countries where I can capture beautiful moments.

Multiple issues: missing 'there are' for existence, plural forms ('squares'), wrong preposition 'in the foreign country' should be 'in foreign countries' or 'in the country', and 'captivate the moment of the end' is unclear; use 'capture beautiful moments'. Rephrase for clarity and correct grammar.

× Absolutely no. I enjoy the cozy and calming atmosphere with a slow peak of umm, people in rural areas which make me uh, comfortable and really meaningful.

✓ No. I enjoy the cozy and calming atmosphere and the slower pace of people in rural areas, which makes me feel comfortable and gives my life more meaning.

'Absolutely no' is unnatural; use 'No.' 'a slow peak of people' is incorrect — correct phrase is 'slower pace of people'. Subject-verb agreement: 'which make me' should be 'which makes me' because the relative clause refers to the atmosphere (singular) or the idea as a whole. 'Really meaningful' is vague; use 'gives my life more meaning' for clarity. Also add articles and correct verb forms.