Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases, and use linking words to connect ideas. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'the vast majority' and 'under construction' instead of 'in process'). Provide one or two specific details about location or purpose to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. The vast majority are office complexes housing businesses, and one skyscraper is currently under construction; it’s planned to include apartments and shops.

제안: Reduce hesitation sounds and filler words, give a direct topic sentence, then add a brief reason and an example using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Use clearer phrasing ('I’m not into') and limit to two or three sentences.

예시: Sometimes. If I see a building with an interesting or creative design, I usually take a photo because I like architectural details. However, I’m not generally interested in photographing ordinary buildings.

제안: Start with a clear statement and give a concise reason with a specific detail. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Mention what aspect attracts you (view, history, observation deck) to make the answer more specific and natural.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I’ve seen many photos of its observation deck and skyline views on Instagram. I’d love to see the panoramic view of the city from the top in person.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then support with a concise reason and a brief example. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'I prefer living in low-rise buildings because they feel safer in an emergency'). Use linking words like 'because' and keep it to two sentences.

예시: No, I prefer living in a low-rise building because I think it would be safer and easier to evacuate in an emergency. For example, if there was a fire, I would feel more comfortable leaving from a smaller block than a high-rise.

× I guess there are many tall buildings near my home.

✓ I guess there are many tall buildings near my home.

No article error here; sentence is correct. Included only for completeness.

× Vast majority of them are business centers, so they rent many offices for business entities.

✓ The vast majority of them are business centers, so they rent many offices to business entities.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'vast majority' is an article error combined with preposition choice. Use 'the vast majority' to refer to most of a known group. Also use the preposition 'to' after 'rent' when indicating the party renting the offices: 'rent offices to business entities.' Suggestion: add 'the' and replace 'for' with 'to.'

× And we also have one more tall building which is still in process.

✓ We also have one more tall building which is still under construction.

Phrase 'in process' is unnatural for buildings; use 'under construction.' This corrects incorrect verb phrase choice, making the sentence clearer and grammatical.

× We hope that it will be a living building.

✓ We hope that it will be a residential building.

'Living building' is not a standard collocation in English. Use the adjective 'residential' to describe a building intended for living. This fixes word choice to a correct adjective.

× Ah, well, it depends.

✓ Ah, well, it depends.

Sentence is correct; present simple 'depends' is appropriate. Included for completeness.

× Whenever I see a beautiful building, uh, with a creative design, I try to take a photo of that, uh, otherwise, umm, I, I'm not uh, in to taking a picture of different buildings.

✓ Whenever I see a beautiful building with a creative design, I try to take a photo of it; otherwise, I'm not into taking pictures of different buildings.

Multiple issues: remove unnecessary pauses. Use 'a photo of it' or 'one' rather than 'a photo of that.' 'In to' is incorrect; correct form is 'into' (preposition). Use plural 'pictures' for generality. Also adjust punctuation to join clauses correctly.

× For sure I'd like to visit Empire State Building in New York.

✓ For sure I'd like to visit the Empire State Building in New York.

Use the definite article 'the' before named buildings like 'Empire State Building.' This is a common article rule for unique landmarks.

× So I, uh, came across an Instagram page of entire State Building where many people have visited this building and, uh, took a beautiful pictures.

✓ I came across an Instagram page of the Empire State Building where many people have visited this building and taken beautiful pictures.

Several errors: missing 'the' before 'Empire State Building' and 'entire' is incorrect. Use past participle 'taken' after 'have' or restructure: 'have visited... and taken beautiful pictures.' Also 'pictures' should be plural without 'a.' Ensure verb forms match: 'have visited... and taken.'

× So I'd love to visit that place too.

✓ So I'd love to visit that place too.

Sentence is correct; 'I'd love to' correctly expresses desire in conditional present. Included for completeness.

× Honestly, I prefer living in a small blocks over tall building because in case of emergency I tend to think that it is more safe to get out from small blocks rather than from tall building.

✓ Honestly, I prefer living in small blocks over tall buildings because in case of an emergency I think it is safer to get out of small blocks rather than tall buildings.

Multiple problems: number agreement—use plural 'small blocks' and 'tall buildings' consistently. Article needed: 'in case of an emergency.' Word order: 'more safe' is nonstandard; use 'safer.' Preposition: use 'get out of' not 'get out from.' Also remove unnecessary 'tend to think'—'I think' is clearer.

× So in terms of this point, I prefer small house.

✓ So in terms of this point, I prefer a small house.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'small house.' Use 'a small house' to refer to one non-specific house. Alternatively, to match earlier preference for blocks, say 'small houses' or 'a small house' for consistency.