Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, and use correct grammar for location descriptions. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a neighbourhood of individual houses, and the only high-rise blocks are farther away, beyond the main road.

제안: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary: give a clear direct answer, avoid repetition, and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words like because or when to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because I like architectural details; for example, when I see an interesting apartment block I often take close-up shots of its facade and wide shots to show its shape.

제안: Clarify your preference and avoid contradictory phrases. Begin with a direct response, then specify one clear example and reason using linking words (for example or because).

예시: Not really; I prefer visiting standalone houses rather than large public buildings. For example, I'd like to visit an old mansion because I enjoy seeing unique interior layouts and historic architecture.

제안: Provide a clear negative or positive answer first, then explain briefly and coherently. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I am afraid of heights') and avoid unclear phrases like 'leap in'. Use one supporting reason.

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights. Although I admire city views from above, I feel more comfortable living in a detached house at ground level.

× Actually not uh, I'm living in a sector which is like there are more individual houses are there so a far bit There are more tall building afar from where I'm living, so there is no tall building near my home.

✓ Actually no. I live in a neighborhood with mostly individual houses, and the tall buildings are far from where I live, so there is no tall building near my home.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure issues (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement problems (ID 27). The original uses mixed tenses and redundant phrases ('are there', 'a far bit', 'afar'), and incorrect verb forms ('I'm living' is awkward in this context). Correction simplifies into clear sentences: use simple present 'I live' for a general fact, combine clauses logically, and use 'tall buildings are far' to match plural subject and correct word order. Suggestion: break long run-on sentences into shorter ones, use simple present for habitual facts, and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× Is of course I do because I would like to take more pictures and portraits.

✓ Yes, of course I do, because I like to take many pictures and portraits.

The phrase 'Is of course I do' is incorrect; this is a sentence structure/auxiliary misuse related to verb+ -ing issues (ID 8) and sentence structure (ID 26). 'Would like to' implies conditional desire; when stating a habitual preference use simple present 'I like' and 'many' instead of 'more' for general quantity. Suggestion: use 'Yes, of course I do' to answer and 'I like to take' or 'I enjoy taking' for habitual actions.

× So I love to take photos of the buildings and with the different types of.

✓ So I love to take photos of buildings of different types.

The original misuses prepositions and ends the sentence incompletely (ID 11 and ID 26). 'Photos of the buildings and with the different types of' is unclear. Correction uses 'photos of buildings of different types' to express variety. Suggestion: place prepositional phrases directly after the noun they modify and avoid trailing prepositions.

× When I see different types of apartment, I'll check my camera automatically and capture the building and so on.

✓ When I see different types of apartments, I automatically check my camera and take photos of the building.

This sentence had tense and verb form issues (IDs 10 and 6). 'Different types of apartment' needs plural 'apartments'. Using 'I'll check' (future) is inconsistent with the habitual action; use present simple 'I check' or 'I automatically check'. 'Capture' is acceptable but 'take photos of' is more natural. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and match noun plurality.

× Actually not, uh, I would like to visit some architectural building which is, which has hold homage, but I would like to be in uh, individual houses like a mansion or something which is individual apart from a building.

✓ Actually no. I would like to visit some architectural buildings that have historical significance, but I would prefer to stay in an individual house, like a mansion, rather than in an apartment building.

Multiple structural and word choice errors (ID 26). 'Hold homage' is incorrect; likely meant 'hold homage' -> 'have historical significance' or 'honor history'. 'Be in individual houses' is unnatural; use 'stay in an individual house'. Also fix plurality and contrast 'rather than in an apartment building.' Suggestion: clarify intended meaning, choose appropriate nouns ('building' vs 'house'), and use clear comparative phrases.

× MMM actually I would say I'm not because rather than living in a building I would like to live in a individual place because I'm fear of height and even though I love the building how it looks from the height, but I don't like to leap in that tall building apart from living in a individual house.

✓ Actually, I would say no. Rather than living in a tall building, I would like to live in an individual house because I am afraid of heights. Even though I like how buildings look from a height, I would not want to live in a tall building; I prefer an individual house.

This sentence contains quantifier and article errors (IDs 14 and 22), incorrect pronoun and adjective use (ID 12 and 13), and sentence structure problems (ID 26). 'I'm fear of height' should be 'I am afraid of heights'. 'Live in a individual place' needs 'an individual place'. 'Leap in that tall building' is incorrect verb choice; likely 'live in' was intended. Suggestion: use correct articles ('an'), correct idiomatic expressions ('afraid of heights'), and simple, consistent sentence structure to state preferences.