Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammar (singular/plural, articles and prepositions), clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Use correct word order and basic linking words like “and” or “which”.

예시: Yes, there is a tall building near my home. It is called Burj Al‑Hamra, and it is one of the longest concrete towers in the area, located south of Kuwait City near Al Ahmadi.

제안: Improve tense consistency and reduce repetition. Give a short general statement, then one or two specific examples of when you take photos. Use linking words such as “when” or “because” correctly.

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings when I walk around my hometown. For example, I often photograph Burj Al‑Hamra, and I also take pictures from the car when the tower looks especially striking by the roadside.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clear nouns. Begin with a topic sentence naming the building, then add one or two specific details (location, travel time, what you would do there). Avoid stuttering and repetitions.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. It is about four to five hours away by plane from my city, and if I go I would take photos with my family next to the tower.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then explain one or two reasons using simple, accurate language. Avoid awkward expressions (e.g. “distance between me and the gravity”) and replace with clear phrases like “I feel dizzy at high altitudes”.

예시: No, I would not like to live in a tall building. I enjoy looking at tall buildings from the street, but living high up makes me feel dizzy and sometimes gives me headaches and nausea.

× Yes, there are a tall building next my home.

✓ Yes, there is a tall building next to my home.

The subject 'a tall building' is singular, so the correct verb is 'is' not 'are'. Also 'next my home' is missing the preposition 'to'. Use 'next to my home'. Suggestion: Use singular verb agreement and include necessary prepositions: 'There is a tall building next to my home.'

× It's called a Burger Hamra.

✓ It's called the Burj Al Hamra.

Names of specific buildings often use 'the' and the original name was misspelt. Use the correct proper noun and include the definite article if the building's established name uses it: 'the Burj Al Hamra.' Suggestion: Check proper nouns and whether 'the' is required for landmarks.

× It's a longest towers in the world that's made of concrete and that's located South of Kuwait City and beside an Al Ahmadi city.

✓ It's one of the longest towers in the world; it's made of concrete and is located south of Kuwait City, beside Al Ahmadi City.

'A longest towers' mixes singular article with plural noun and superlative form incorrectly. Use 'one of the longest towers' for a member of a group. 'That's made' is acceptable but repetition of 'that's' is awkward; use 'it's' and correct capitalization for 'south' when not part of a proper name. 'An Al Ahmadi city' is wrong because 'Al Ahmadi City' is a proper name and does not need 'an'. Suggestion: Use 'one of the longest towers' for plural comparisons and capitalise proper nouns correctly.

× Yes, I do sometime when I walking around my hometown, I take a I take a photo for the Burj Al Hamra and also when I go by by car, I take a photo in the road because Berger Hamrats look like a nice and the road.

✓ Yes, I do sometimes. When I walk around my hometown, I take a photo of the Burj Al Hamra, and also when I go by car I take photos from the road because Burj Al Hamra looks nice from there.

Multiple issues: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'When I walking' needs present simple 'when I walk'. 'I take a I take a photo for' has repetition and wrong preposition; use 'take a photo of'. 'by by car' duplicated 'by'. 'in the road' should be 'from the road' or 'on the road' depending on meaning. Proper noun spelling 'Burj Al Hamra' corrected. Suggestion: Use adverbs correctly, simple present for habitual actions, and correct prepositions: 'I do sometimes. When I walk..., I take a photo of... from the road.'

× Yes, there is a building I wish to visited I visit.

✓ Yes, there is a building I wish to visit.

The verb 'wish' should be followed by the base form 'to visit', not the past tense 'visited'. Also 'I visit' is redundant. Use 'I wish to visit.' Suggestion: After 'wish to' use the base verb: 'wish to visit.'

× Is it a purge Evil towers that's located in the Paris that's far from my house around 4 to 5 hours by aircraft.

✓ It is the Eiffel Tower, which is in Paris and is about four to five hours from my house by plane.

The original contains misheard/misspelt name 'purge Evil towers' instead of 'Eiffel Tower'. 'In the Paris' incorrectly uses 'the' before a city. Use 'in Paris'. 'That's far' is acceptable but improve to 'which is about four to five hours... by plane.' Suggestion: Use correct names and avoid 'the' before city names: 'the Eiffel Tower in Paris'.

× When I when I will go to there I will take a photo with my family, uh, next to the tower.

✓ When I go there, I will take a photo with my family next to the tower.

In conditional/time clauses starting with 'when', use present simple ('when I go') rather than 'will go'. Also remove duplicate 'when I' and unnecessary filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use present simple in 'when' clauses: 'When I go there, I will...'.

× Actually no, because I don't like a highest building to live it, but I I like to see it in the road and the street so I don't like I live it in the highest because there is a lot of distance between me and the gravity and I feel a headache and nausea and vomiting sometime.

✓ Actually no, because I don't like living in very tall buildings. I like to see them from the road and the street, but I don't like to live in the highest ones because it makes me feel dizzy, gives me headaches, and sometimes causes nausea and vomiting.

Many issues: 'a highest building' is incorrect article and adjective order; use 'very tall buildings' or 'the highest ones'. 'to live it' is wrong; use 'to live in them' or the gerund 'living in'. 'I like to see it' should agree in number with 'buildings' -> 'see them'. 'There is a lot of distance between me and the gravity' is unnatural; use 'it makes me feel dizzy' or 'I feel the effects of height'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Use consistent grammatical forms and correct pronoun references. Suggestion: Use gerund for activities ('living in'), ensure pronoun agreement ('them'), and use natural expressions for effects of height: 'it makes me feel dizzy'.