Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations, give a brief specific detail (e.g., approximate population with correct phrasing), and finish with a short concluding remark. Use linking words if you add details.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small town of only a few thousand people. Most buildings are single-family houses, although there is a relatively tall church near the town centre.

제안: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement about your habit, then support with specific reasons and examples using linking words (for example, because, especially). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially historic ones. For example, when I visited Vienna I photographed many old facades because I admire their intricate architecture; I also loved photographing Notre Dame in Paris for its Gothic details.

제안: Clarify and stay on topic. Provide a clear reason and avoid irrelevant details. Correct repetitions and awkward phrasing. If you mention media (TV show), explain briefly why it influenced your interest. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I enjoy the city’s vibrant atmosphere and panoramic views from tall buildings. I first became interested after seeing it featured in a TV show, which made me curious to see the observation deck in person.

제안: Make your reasons concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid redundant phrases like 'for me' at the end.

예시: No, I prefer living in a house because I grew up in a small town and value having a private garden. Also, I would like to design my own home, which is easier to do with a standalone house rather than an apartment in a tall building.

× I think the population is about thousands people, so we only have ordinary houses.

✓ I think the population is about a few thousand people, so we only have ordinary houses.

The noun 'people' with a numeric quantifier requires a number or phrase like 'a few thousand'. 'Thousands people' is incorrect word order and missing an article/quantifier. Use 'a few thousand people' or 'thousands of people'. Suggestion: use 'a few thousand people' or 'thousands of people' to show quantity correctly.

× They're look really beautiful.

✓ They look really beautiful.

Using 'they're' (they are) plus the base verb 'look' creates a grammatical conflict; present continuous would be 'they're looking', but the intended meaning is a general state so use simple present 'they look'. Suggestion: use simple present 'they look' for general descriptions, or 'they're looking' if describing a temporary action.

× I also love taking photos of churches, especially from Notre Dame in Paris.

✓ I also love taking photos of churches, especially of Notre Dame in Paris.

Use 'of' to indicate the object being photographed. 'From Notre Dame' suggests origin or vantage point, which is not intended. Suggestion: use 'photos of Notre Dame' when referring to photographing that building.

× Yes there is. I would love to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I love New York.

✓ Yes, there is. I would love to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I love New York.

Missing comma after 'Yes' is punctuation rather than grammar type; however 'Yes there is' is acceptable but improved with a comma. No correction required for grammar beyond punctuation. Suggestion: add a comma after introductory 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation.

× I just I just like New York and the Empire State Building is one in one of my favorite episodes, Pretty Little Liars.

✓ I just, I just like New York, and the Empire State Building was in one of my favorite TV shows' episodes, Pretty Little Liars.

The sentence has repetition and incorrect structure: 'is one in one of my favorite episodes' is ungrammatical. If the building appeared in an episode, use past simple 'was in'. Also clarify that Pretty Little Liars is a TV show and use possessive 'TV show's episodes' or rephrase 'an episode of Pretty Little Liars.' Suggestion: simplify to 'the Empire State Building was in an episode of my favorite TV show, Pretty Little Liars.'

× No, I think I prefer having my own house because it's just a thing you want when you're living a small town.

✓ No, I think I prefer having my own house because it's just the kind of thing you want when you're living in a small town.

Use 'in a small town' (preposition 'in' for location). Also 'a thing' is vague; 'the kind of thing' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'living in a small town' and 'the kind of thing you want' for natural phrasing.

× So that's why I prefer a house for me.

✓ So that's why I prefer to have a house.

'A house for me' is awkward; prefer the infinitive phrase or 'a house for myself' (reflexive). Using 'prefer to have a house' is clearer and more natural. Suggestion: use 'I prefer to have a house' or 'I prefer a house for myself'.