Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは明確ですが、文法ミスと不自然な表現が見られます。より自然にするには、’there aren’t any’や’because I live in the countryside’のように現在形と否定の形を正しく使い、理由と結果をつなぐ接続詞（for example, so）を適切に使ってください。また、“a lot of nature area”は不自然なので“lots of natural areas”や“a lot of nature”に直しましょう。具体例を一文入れると説得力が増します。

예시: There aren’t any high‑rise buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. As a result, the area is very peaceful and has lots of natural areas, such as rice fields and small forests.

제안: 答えは内容が具体的で良いですが、冗長なフレーズ（’basically I usually tend to’）が重複しているため簡潔にしましょう。また、理由を述べる際の語順を改善し、リンク語（for example, because）で繋げるとより自然です。犬の写真について具体的な場面を付け加えると説得力が増します。

예시: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings. I prefer photographing leafy areas because being surrounded by greenery relaxes me. For example, I often take pictures of my dog playing in the park.

제안: 答えは意図が伝わりますが、固有名詞や表現の誤り（’Tokyo Sky 3’, ‘climb it’）があり、文法と語彙の選択を改善する必要があります。建物名は正しく（e.g. Tokyo Skytree）言い、‘visit’や‘go up’を使うと自然です。理由は具体的に述べ、接続語（because, since, as）で繋げてください。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree and go up to the observation deck because it offers spectacular views of the city, especially at sunset.

제안: 主張は分かりますが、多くの文法ミスと繰り返しが目立ちます（’as as’, ‘when when’）。英語では’prefer low‑rise buildings’や’since it is harder to evacuate tall buildings in a fire or earthquake’等に言い換えてください。理由は明確にし、1〜2の短い具体例を加えると良いです。

예시: No, I prefer low‑rise buildings because it’s generally easier and safer to evacuate in case of a fire or an earthquake. For instance, stairs are shorter and emergency exits are easier to reach.

× There are not any high rise buildings because I'm living in the countryside.

✓ There are no high-rise buildings because I live in the countryside.

Use simple present 'I live' for a habitual or permanent situation rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Use 'no' with plural countable noun rather than 'not any'. Hyphenate 'high-rise'. Suggestion: Say 'There are no high-rise buildings' and 'I live in the countryside.'

× However, I love my hometown so that there are a lot of nature area.

✓ However, I love my hometown because there are a lot of natural areas.

Use 'because' for reason instead of 'so that'. 'Nature area' is incorrect; use adjective 'natural' and plural 'areas' or 'a lot of nature' without 'area'. Suggestion: 'because there are a lot of natural areas' or 'because there is a lot of nature.'

× No, basically I usually tend to take pictures of the leafy areas as it makes me relaxed.

✓ No. Basically, I usually tend to take pictures of leafy areas because they make me feel relaxed.

Place adverbs coherently: 'Basically' at clause start, 'usually' near the verb. Use 'because' for reason. 'It makes me relaxed' is unnatural; use 'they make me feel relaxed' with plural subject 'leafy areas'. Suggestion: 'Basically, I usually take pictures of leafy areas because they make me feel relaxed.'

× In addition, I'm a big fan of taking pictures of my lovely dog who is so adorable.

✓ In addition, I'm a big fan of taking pictures of my lovely dog, who is so adorable.

Add a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause 'who is so adorable'. Otherwise the sentence grammar is correct. Commas clarify meaning. Suggestion: Insert comma: 'my lovely dog, who is so adorable.'

× Yes, I'd like to go to Tokyo Sky 3 and climb it.

✓ Yes, I'd like to go to Tokyo Sky 3 and climb it.

No grammatical error detected according to the provided list. The sentence is acceptable for intention/future. (No change needed.)

× This is because Tokyo Sky today is one of the most significant site in Japan.

✓ This is because Tokyo Sky is one of the most significant sites in Japan today.

Word order: place 'today' at end for clarity. 'Site' should be plural 'sites' to agree with 'one of the'. Suggestion: 'one of the most significant sites in Japan today.'

× No, I prefer to lower buildings as as it is challenging to escape from highlight buildings when when fire, when buildings are fired or earthquake is caused.

✓ No, I prefer lower buildings because it is more difficult to escape from high-rise buildings during a fire or an earthquake.

Fix repetition 'as as' and 'when when'. Use 'because' for reason. 'Lower buildings' is acceptable but 'prefer lower buildings' is more natural. 'Highlight buildings' is wrong; correct term is 'high-rise buildings'. Use 'during a fire' and 'during an earthquake' rather than passive 'when buildings are fired' or 'earthquake is caused'. Also use comparative 'more difficult' to show relative difficulty. Suggestion: 'No, I prefer lower buildings because it is more difficult to escape from high-rise buildings during a fire or an earthquake.'