Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện ngữ pháp. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ thích hợp. Chú ý chia động từ (e.g., "when I'm travelling") và kết thúc câu đầy đủ để người nghe hiểu ý muốn diễn đạt.

예시: Yes, I do. I always enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I can notice how landscapes and buildings change between towns and countryside. For example, I often see different styles of houses and farmlands, which makes the journey more interesting.

제안: Tránh dùng nhiều từ lặp (like, OK, yeah) và hoàn thành ý tưởng. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ liên kết như "because" hoặc "so" để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because it helps me remember interesting places. For instance, I usually photograph colourful markets or unusual buildings and later share them with my friends or keep them in my photo album.

제안: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng cần tránh tiếng ừ à (uh, OK, yeah) và mở rộng ý bằng 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể khác (ví dụ hoạt động yêu thích, cảm xúc hoặc so sánh ngắn). Sử dụng cấu trúc mạch lạc: câu chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ.

예시: I prefer the sea because I find the sound of the waves very relaxing and it helps me unwind. I also enjoy walking along the shore and swimming, which makes beach trips a great way to relax and recharge.

× Yes I do I really enjoy looking at looking out to see the scenery when I'm traveling by a bus or a car yeah I can see the difference between the places when I traveling on it and and it make me feel like I.

✓ Yes, I do. I really enjoy looking out to see the scenery when I'm travelling by bus or car. I can see the differences between places when I travel, and it makes me feel happy.

The original contains multiple present tense and subject-verb agreement errors. 'I'm traveling by a bus or a car' is awkward: articles before modes of transport are unnecessary in English; use 'by bus or car' or no article. 'when I traveling on it' lacks the auxiliary 'am' or should be 'when I travel' (simple present). 'and it make me' should be 'it makes me' to agree with singular subject. Suggestions: use consistent present simple or present continuous as appropriate: 'I enjoy looking out' (present simple for habitual action), 'when I'm travelling' (present continuous for ongoing), or 'when I travel' (present simple). Ensure subject-verb agreement (he/she/it + -s) and omit unnecessary articles with modes of transport.

× Absolutely, yes. I really like it. OK. I really like to use my phone to like, capture all the beautiful scenes that I see on the way to the places. Yeah, to the destination. And when I look at it, I can. When I look back at it, I can.

✓ Absolutely. I really like it. I often use my phone to capture all the beautiful scenes I see on the way to my destination. When I look back at the photos, I can remember the trip.

The original has fragmented and repetitive sentences and colloquial filler words ('like' repeated). 'on the way to the places' is awkward; use 'on the way to my destination'. Phrases 'when I look at it, I can. When I look back at it, I can.' are incomplete (sentence without a verb/predicate). Suggestions: remove unnecessary fillers, combine short fragments into complete sentences, and complete the intended meaning (e.g., 'I can remember the trip' or 'I can relive the moment').

× If I have to choose, I will choose the sea because I love the sounds of the waves when I can lie down on the beach and enjoy myself. Uh, OK, yeah.

✓ If I had to choose, I would choose the sea because I love the sound of the waves when I lie down on the beach and enjoy myself.

The conditional 'If I have to choose, I will choose' is acceptable but more natural to use the second conditional 'If I had to choose, I would choose' for hypothetical preference. 'the sounds of the waves' can be singular 'the sound of the waves' or 'sounds' both acceptable; choose 'sound' for cohesion. 'when I can lie down' is unnecessary modal 'can'—use simple present 'when I lie down' for habitual or general truths. Suggestions: use appropriate conditional form for hypothetical choices and avoid redundant modals.