Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите увереннее и избегайте повторов и заполнителей (uh, umm). Начните с прямого тематического предложения, затем добавьте конкретную причину и краткий пример. Также замените разговорные слова на более точные (e.g., "travel-sick" вместо "carsick"). Попрактикуйтесь произносить полные предложения без пауз и повторов.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy discovering new places and interesting views. For example, last month I watched rural landscapes and small towns pass by, which made the journey pleasant because I could observe local life.

제안: Сократите длинные фразы и используйте связку для логичности (например, "because" или "so"). Дайте один конкретный пример и результат (что происходит после). Избегайте повторов слов (photographs/photos).

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially in unfamiliar places, because it helps me remember the trip. For example, I took several shots of a coastal road last summer and later used them to create an album I shared with friends.

제안: Начинайте с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину структурированно, используя связки (e.g., "because", "when"). Избегайте грамматических ошибок и повторов (e.g., "they're they're", "and and"). Уточните, что значит "It helps me" — помогает расслабиться или поддерживает здоровье. Попрактикуйте правильный порядок слов и сокращение пауз.

예시: It depends on my mood and company, but I usually prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and the air is fresher. I also enjoy hiking there, which helps me relax and stay fit.

× Umm, yes, I often look out the window and I travel by bus or car because I really enjoy seeing new places and uh, interesting scenery.

✓ Umm, yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I really enjoy seeing new places and interesting scenery.

'look out of the window' and 'when I travel' are natural present simple expressions for habitual actions; removed filler words and redundant conjunction to improve grammar and clarity.'

× I can't read the books or uh, look uh, look to my phone because of carsick.

✓ I can't read books or look at my phone because I get carsick.

Use 'read books' (no definite article for general activity), 'look at my phone' is correct preposition, and 'get carsick' is the natural verb phrase; corrected pronoun/phrase usage and article use.'

× Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when traveling to new places, and photographing them helps me remember the journey and I also share photographs to social media.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when traveling to new places; photographing them helps me remember the journey and I also share the photos on social media.

Use present simple for habits, replace 'share photographs to social media' with 'share the photos on social media' (correct preposition and article); tightened punctuation for clarity.'

× Unwell, it depends on my mood and who with I'm going there.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood and who I am going with.

'Who I am going with' is the correct word order; 'unwell' is incorrect here — likely meant 'well'; moved preposition to end in natural spoken style and corrected pronoun placement.'

× But I prefer more mountains because I find they're they're peacefulness and I like fresh air and and I really like hiking.

✓ But I prefer the mountains because I find they are peaceful, I like the fresh air, and I really enjoy hiking.

Use 'prefer the mountains' (definite article), 'they are peaceful' (adjective, not 'peacefulness'), remove duplicate words, use 'enjoy' for activities; corrected article and adjective usage.'

× It helps me.

✓ Hiking helps me relax.

'It helps me' is vague; specifying 'Hiking helps me relax' gives a clear subject and completes the sentence structure.'