Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct small grammar mistakes and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to add coherence.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find changing landscapes interesting. For example, I enjoy watching villages and rice fields pass by, which helps me relax during a long journey.

제안: Make the sentence natural and grammatical. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and give one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating phrases and use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example' correctly.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I find some views particularly beautiful. For example, I once photographed a sunset behind a mountain range from the highway, and the colours were amazing.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and improve grammar and word choice. Remove fillers, use linking words to give reasons, and provide a concise specific detail or example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For instance, I like spending weekends at the coast where I can swim, sunbathe, and listen to the waves, which I find more pleasant than hiking in the mountains.

× I look, uh, out the window at the scenery way traveling by bus or car because, uh, for me it's really interesting and I'm, uh, very like, uh, see out the window.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because, for me it's really interesting and I really like to see the view outside.

The original uses 'way traveling' incorrectly; use 'when traveling' (preposition + -ing) to indicate time. Also 'very like, see' is ungrammatical: use 'really like to see' or 'really enjoy seeing'. Suggestion: use 'when' + verb-ing for time clauses and 'like to' + base verb for preferences.

× I take. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a really beautiful scenery and I love take photos.

✓ Yes, I do. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is really beautiful and I love taking photos.

Short answer 'I take' is incorrect; use 'Yes, I do.' Also 'a really beautiful scenery' is wrong because 'scenery' is uncountable and doesn't use 'a'. Use 'it is really beautiful' and 'love taking photos' requires the -ing form after 'love' when referring to activities. Suggestion: use auxiliary 'do' for short answers, treat 'scenery' as uncountable, and use gerund after verbs of preference.

× I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a really beautiful scenery and I love take photos.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is really beautiful and I love taking photos.

The phrase 'a really beautiful scenery' incorrectly uses the article 'a' with the uncountable noun 'scenery'. Remove the article and say 'the scenery is really beautiful' or 'it is really beautiful'. Suggestion: learn which nouns are countable vs uncountable and avoid using 'a' with uncountable nouns.

× I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a really beautiful scenery and I love take photos.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is really beautiful and I love taking photos.

The original sentence structure is awkward; 'outside the car window' is acceptable but more natural is 'from the car window' or 'outside the car window'. No major preposition error besides awkwardness. Suggestion: prefer 'from the car window' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer the sea because I really like a swim and the sea very beautiful for me.

✓ I prefer the sea because I really like swimming and the sea is very beautiful to me.

'I really like a swim' is incorrect; use the gerund 'swimming' after 'like' when talking about activities. Also 'the sea very beautiful for me' is missing the verb 'is' and should use 'to me' for opinion. Suggestion: use 'like' + -ing for activities and include the verb 'is' in descriptions.

× And umm, it's so cool for me because I don't like the mountains.

✓ And it's so cool for me because I don't like the mountains.

This sentence only needed removal of filler 'umm'; grammatically it is fine. 'It's so cool for me' is informal but acceptable. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fillers to improve fluency.