Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "by bus or by car" twice, "also" at the end). Use correct singular/plural and articles ("count the houses" not "count the house").

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy counting the houses I pass. For example, I like observing people doing daily activities, and this helps me notice differences between neighbourhoods.

제안: Correct grammar and clarity: use a clear topic sentence, then a linked supporting detail. Fix word choice and tense errors (e.g., "take pictures of the scenery", "especially", "new areas", "this helps me to remember the place"). Avoid awkward phrases like "take sense of". Be specific about why you photograph scenes (memories, sharing, reference).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially if people are waving or the view is unusual. I usually photograph new areas to remember them and later share the best shots with my friends.

제안: Make your opinion clear with one topic sentence, then give one concrete supporting reason using linking words. Correct repetitions and grammar ("calm and uplifting", "think deeply", "help me find solutions"). Avoid repeating the same point without added detail; give a specific example of how mountains help you relax.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they feel calm and uplifting. For example, when I hike I can think deeply without interruptions, which often helps me solve personal problems and return home feeling refreshed.

× Yes, I often look out the window while traveling by bus or by car and this is because I love to count the house that I see while traveling.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window while traveling by bus or by car, and this is because I love to count the houses that I see while traveling.

Errors: 'look out the window' -> 'look out of the window' is more natural phrasing; 'count the house' uses singular 'house' incorrectly when referring to multiple houses seen, so plural 'houses' is required (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). Also ensure gerund 'traveling' is consistent (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). Suggestion: use 'look out of the window' and pluralize nouns that refer to multiple items; keep 'traveling' as gerund for ongoing action.

× Most of the time I get to watch other people through the window and it's fun for me also.

✓ Most of the time I get to watch other people through the window, and it's fun for me too.

Error: 'also' at end is acceptable but 'too' is more natural here; comma needed before conjunction connecting clauses (Sentence structure, ID 26). Use 'too' instead of 'also' for naturalness and place it at end. Suggestion: use '...it's fun for me too.' and add a comma before 'and' linking independent clauses.

× Yes, I often take pictures of of the scenery outside the window, most especially scenes of people waving at me.

✓ Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery outside the window, especially scenes of people waving at me.

Error: repeated preposition 'of of' is a typo; 'most especially' is wordy—'especially' is sufficient (Preposition error, ID 11; sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestion: remove duplicate 'of' and use 'especially' for clarity.

× I make sure I take sense of new places that I have just found or new area that I have never been to and this is help will help me to keep memory of the place.

✓ I make sure I take photos of new places that I have just discovered or areas that I have never been to, and this helps me to keep memories of the place.

Multiple errors: 'take sense' is incorrect — intended 'take photos' (Sentence structure, ID 26); 'new area' should be plural 'areas' when general (Quantifier/plural, ID 14 and 1); 'this is help will help' is ungrammatical—use 'this helps' (Verb tense/structure, ID 6); 'keep memory' -> 'keep memories' (Article/number issue, ID 22/1). Suggestion: use clear verbs ('take photos' or 'remember'), pluralize countable nouns when appropriate, and use correct verb agreement 'this helps'.

× I prefer the mountains because I find it calm and elevating.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I find them calm and uplifting.

Error: 'the mountains' is plural but pronoun 'it' is singular; should be 'them' (Pronoun use, ID 12 / Subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Elevating' is awkward here; 'uplifting' is the appropriate adjective (Incorrect use of adjectives, ID 13). Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and choose natural adjectives.

× Whenever I climb the mountain I feel relaxed and my mind gets to think deep on issues that I might be going through and then gives me solution.

✓ Whenever I climb the mountain, I feel relaxed, and my mind starts to think deeply about issues that I might be going through and then gives me solutions.

Errors: missing commas for clause separation (Sentence structure, ID 26). 'Gets to think deep' is incorrect — use 'starts to think deeply' or 'begins thinking deeply' (Adverb formation, ID 13 and Verb + -ing form, ID 8). 'Gives me solution' requires plural 'solutions' or an article 'a solution' (Singular/plural and article errors, ID 1 and 22). Suggestion: use 'think deeply about' and 'gives me solutions' or 'gives me a solution' as appropriate.

× I solution to issues also.

✓ I also find solutions to issues.

Original fragment 'I solution to issues also' is ungrammatical: 'solution' is a noun and cannot be the verb here (Sentence structure, ID 26). Reorder to 'I also find solutions to issues' to use correct verb 'find' and plural 'solutions'. Suggestion: use a verb such as 'find' or 'come up with' and place 'also' before the verb or after the subject for natural word order.