Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and communicates your idea, but it is slightly wordy and has minor repetition and some unclear phrasing ("the view is just more, I think, easier to look at"). To improve, make your main point in a clear topic sentence, remove filler phrases, use one or two specific supporting details, and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to a maximum of 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel. When the air is fresh and the scenery is calm, I find it relaxing to watch the landscape pass by. For example, I enjoy seeing fields and small villages because they help me unwind during a long trip.

제안: Good content and clear motivation for taking photos, but the answer is a little long and repeats the idea of sharing and memory. Improve by stating the main reason first, adding one specific example, and using a linking word to make the answer more coherent. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of mountain scenery so I can share the experience with friends who are not there. For example, I recently photographed a snowy ridge and sent it to my friends with a short description so they could see what I saw.

제안: The answer directly addresses the question and gives a reason, which is good. Improve clarity and vocabulary: avoid vague phrases like "haven't gotten any experience" and correct imprecise wording "white snow cave mountains." Provide one specific descriptive detail and, if possible, a brief comparison to show awareness of the sea even if you have not experienced it.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I grew up near them and find them peaceful and scenic. Although I've never been to the sea, I imagine it would be lively; however, the snow-covered peaks and quiet trails are what I enjoy most.

× Yes, I do. It's really nice to look out the window when the air is fresh and the view is just more, I think, easier to look at because you're not doing anything and you can wander your eyes anywhere and just enjoy the moment.

✓ Yes, I do. It's really nice to look out the window when the air is fresh and the view is, I think, easier to look at because you're not doing anything and you can let your eyes wander anywhere and just enjoy the moment.

The original sentence uses awkward phrasing 'the view is just more, I think, easier to look at' which disrupts present tense clarity and natural word order. Also 'wander your eyes' is a non-idiomatic verb phrase. Use 'the view is, I think, easier to look at' to maintain present tense and correct word order, and 'let your eyes wander' as the idiomatic expression. Suggestion: keep simple present verbs and place parenthetical comments (like 'I think') between commas.

× Yes I do, whenever I see a scenery with beautiful mountains, I like to take a picture so I can show my friends if they are not with me because I like to share the experience with my friends too. I like the overall memory that the photo captures.

✓ Yes, I do. Whenever I see beautiful scenery with mountains, I like to take a picture so I can show my friends if they are not with me because I like to share the experience with them too. I like the overall memory that the photo captures.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not take the article 'a'; use 'beautiful scenery' instead of 'a scenery'. Also repetition of 'my friends' is awkward; use the pronoun 'them' for conciseness and correct pronoun reference. Keep present tense verbs consistent. Suggestion: avoid treating uncountable nouns as countable and use pronouns to prevent repetition.

× As Nepal is a landlocked country, I haven't gotten any experience with the seas, so I prefer mountains because they are more peaceful and just beautiful to look at.

✓ As Nepal is a landlocked country, I haven't had any experience with the sea, so I prefer mountains because they are more peaceful and simply beautiful to look at.

Use 'have had' or 'haven't had' for experience in present perfect rather than 'haven't gotten'. 'Sea' as a general concept is uncountable here, so use 'the sea' or 'the seas' depending on meaning; 'the sea' is natural. Also 'just beautiful' is informal; 'simply beautiful' or 'very beautiful' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'haven't had any experience with the sea' to sound natural and grammatically correct.

× The white snow cave mountains are my favorite.

✓ The snow-capped mountains are my favorite.

'White snow cave mountains' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect collocations. Use 'snow-capped mountains' to describe mountains with snow on their peaks. 'White' and 'snow' are redundant; 'cave' is not appropriate here. Suggestion: learn common collocations for geographic features (e.g., 'snow-capped mountains', 'rocky cliffs').