Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and use linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "watching" twice) and correct prepositions and verb forms ("in the window" → "out of the window" or "through the window"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and use words like "especially" or "for example" to link ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, in summer I like to watch fields of wildflowers, and in winter I enjoy snowy hills, which feel very peaceful.

제안: Be specific and remove hesitations. Begin with a clear affirmative sentence, then explain when and why you take photos with one specific example. Correct collocations ("take photos of the scenery", not "in this outside"), and avoid vague phrases like "beautiful like color"—use precise descriptions such as "vibrant colours" or "golden light".

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos of the scenery through the window when the light or colours are striking. For instance, last month I photographed a river at sunset because the golden light and reflections looked beautiful, and I keep the pictures to remind me of the trip.

제안: Give a direct preference sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar and word order ("In my country we don't have a sea, so I prefer the mountains"). Use correct nouns and verbs ("hiking", "surrounded by mountains"). Avoid repetition and keep responses concise.

예시: I prefer the mountains because my country has no sea and we are surrounded by beautiful peaks. As a result, my family often go hiking there and I enjoy photographing the views and the valleys below.

× When I'm travelling by bus or a car, I really into watching outside in the window, especially in the summer or the winter, I like to watching a very beautiful landscape.

✓ When I'm travelling by bus or by car, I really enjoy watching out of the window. Especially in summer or winter, I like watching beautiful landscapes.

Errors: incorrect verb form after 'really' (should be 'really enjoy' not 'really into'), incorrect use of 'watching outside in the window' (use 'watching out of the window'), unnecessary article 'a car' after 'by' (use 'by car'), and 'I like to watching' mixes infinitive and -ing (use 'I like watching' or 'I like to watch'). Suggestion: use 'enjoy' or 'like' followed by the -ing form for activities (enjoy watching, like watching), remove unnecessary articles with means of transport (by car), and use 'out of the window' or 'out the window' for looking outside. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Yes, really. I often take a photo in this outside in the window, umm, when I see some beautiful fishing and beautiful like color and beautiful nature, I want to take a photo and keep to myself.

✓ Yes, I often take photos out of the window when I see beautiful scenes, colours and nature; I want to take photos to keep for myself.

Errors: wrong prepositions 'in this outside in the window' should be 'out of the window' or 'through the window'; 'take a photo' plural better as 'take photos' for habitual action; 'keep to myself' is unnatural for keeping photos (use 'keep for myself'). Also 'beautiful fishing' is likely wrong word choice—use 'scenes' or 'views' and 'colour' or 'colours'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for position/movement (out of, through), pluralise for habitual actions, and choose appropriate nouns (scenery, views) and natural phrases ('keep for myself'). Grammar problem type ID:11

× To be honest we in the in my country we don't have a sea.

✓ To be honest, in my country we don't have a sea.

Errors: unnecessary repetition 'we in the in my country' and missing comma after introductory phrase. 'There is/are' could be used but not required here. Suggestion: place 'in my country' at the start and use a comma: 'To be honest, in my country we don't have a sea.' Grammar problem type ID:3

× For this reason I prefer the mountain.

✓ For this reason I prefer the mountains.

Error: 'the mountain' is singular but generic preference between mountains and sea should be plural 'mountains'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally about mountain regions: 'I prefer the mountains.' Grammar problem type ID:1

× We started my country surrounding many beautiful mountain and we like to go to the hiking and take a photo in the mountain and around surrounding them.

✓ My country is surrounded by many beautiful mountains, and we like to go hiking and take photos in and around them.

Errors: incorrect verb 'started' is wrong word choice; missing passive structure 'is surrounded by' needed; 'many beautiful mountain' should be plural 'mountains'; 'go to the hiking' is wrong collocation—use 'go hiking'; 'take a photo in the mountain and around surrounding them' is awkward and redundant—use 'take photos in and around them'. Suggestion: use correct passive 'is surrounded by', plural nouns, correct collocations ('go hiking'), and concise phrasing for locations ('in and around them'). Grammar problem type ID:26}]} },