Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời đã trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi nhưng còn lặp ý và thiếu mạch lạc. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), dùng liên từ để nối ý và rút ngắn câu để tránh cụm từ thừa (ví dụ: "because" lặp, "umm"). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về việc nhìn ra cửa sổ hoặc vẽ sẽ làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn (ví dụ: mô tả một cảnh bạn thường vẽ). Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

예시: Not usually, because my parents limit my phone use for health reasons. Instead, I often sketch the passing landscape in my sketchbook, especially small villages and tree-lined roads. For example, last month I drew a row of old houses by the highway which helped me remember the trip.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và hợp lý, có giải thích vì sao ít chụp nhưng vẫn nêu ngoại lệ. Tuy nhiên bạn lặp lại thông tin đã nói trước đó và có vài lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ thì và số: "gives" nên "give" hoặc cấu trúc khác). Nên mở đầu ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ hợp lý (e.g. "However, if the view is especially beautiful, we stop to take photos") và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về một lần dừng để chụp ảnh.

예시: I usually avoid taking photos because my family prefers to limit phone use, but if the view is particularly striking we stop and take pictures. For instance, on a recent trip we stopped by a hilltop to photograph a golden sunset over the valley.

제안: Câu trả lời đã nêu sở thích rõ ràng và nêu vài lý do, nhưng có hiện tượng lặp từ và vài lỗi ngữ pháp/điều hòa (ví dụ: "sunrise and the sunsets", "sceneries seems"). Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn, dùng linking words để liệt kê lý do (e.g. "because..., and also...") và cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể hoặc ví dụ về trải nghiệm ở biển. Giữ câu súc tích và chính xác ngữ pháp.

예시: I prefer the sea because I love watching both sunrise and sunset over the water, and the fresh sea breeze always relaxes me. For example, last summer I walked along the shore at dawn and felt calm watching the waves lap at my feet.

× my father told me that I was not allowed to use my phone because it can worsen my eyesight and gives me headaches.

✓ my father told me that I was not allowed to use my phone because it can worsen my eyesight and give me headaches.

The verb 'give' should be in base form after 'can' (a modal-like auxiliary 'can' requires base verb). Use 'give' not 'gives'. Suggestion: after modal verbs (can, may, should) always use the base form of the verb.

× So sometimes when traveling by car with my family, I usually doodle some scenes in my sketchbook.

✓ So sometimes when traveling by car with my family, I usually doodle scenes in my sketchbook.

The sentence mixes 'sometimes' and 'usually' (both adverbs of frequency) which is redundant but not strictly ungrammatical; however 'doodle some scenes' is acceptable. Main correction is stylistic: remove 'some' for conciseness. Suggestion: avoid redundant adverbs and unnecessary words to make speech natural.

× using a phone when traveling by car can worsen my eyesight and gives me headaches.

✓ using a phone when traveling by car can worsen my eyesight and give me headaches.

Same issue: after 'can' use base verb 'give' not 'gives'. Suggestion: remember modal auxiliaries take base verb form.

× However, whenever we came across a beautiful scenery, we usually stopped the car and took a picture as a memory to the trip.

✓ However, whenever we came across beautiful scenery, we usually stopped the car and took a picture as a memento of the trip.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'; use 'beautiful scenery' rather than 'a beautiful scenery'. Also 'as a memory to the trip' is awkward; better: 'as a memento of the trip'. Tense 'came across' and 'stopped' and 'took' are past tense which fits 'whenever we came across' - acceptable. Suggestion: use correct collocations with uncountable nouns and prefer 'memento of' for keepsake.

× I prefer the seaside because I can watch both the sunrise and the sunsets and I really enjoy the chilling sea, sea air, Uh, and moreover, I really love the feeling of the sea waves striking at my feet and the sceneries seems enthusiastic.

✓ I prefer the seaside because I can watch both the sunrise and the sunset, and I really enjoy the cool sea air. Moreover, I love the feeling of the sea waves striking my feet, and the scenery seems vibrant.

Multiple issues: 'sunsets' should be singular 'sunset' to match 'sunrise' (consistency), 'chilling sea, sea air' is awkward — use 'cool sea air'. 'Striking at my feet' should be 'striking my feet' (no 'at'). 'Sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is uncountable, so use singular. 'Seems enthusiastic' is wrong collocation for scenery; 'vibrant' or 'exciting' fits better. Suggestions: use uncountable nouns correctly, avoid redundant words, choose appropriate collocations and adjective-noun pairs.