Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Работайте над грамматикой и произношением, а также над структурой ответа. Начните с чёткой основной фразы (Yes/No + краткое пояснение), затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными деталями. Исправьте частые ошибки: 'Yas' → 'Yes', 'every times' → 'every time' или 'always', 'lookout' → 'look out', 'vendor' кажется ошибкой — используйте 'views' или 'sunrise'. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) для связности.

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I often see colourful sunrises and small villages passing by, which I find very relaxing.

제안: Устраните повторения и неверную капитализацию, стройте предложение ясно: тема → причина → пример. Избегайте тавтологии ('really find it really') и неверных конструкций ('I like Do it'). Добавьте конкретику: что именно привлекает в кадрах, когда вы фотографируете. Используйте связки: 'because', 'so', 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because the landscapes look beautiful in different light. For example, I usually capture sunrise moments and reflections on water when we pass lakes, which make the photos quite atmospheric.

제안: Ответ не отвечает прямо на вопрос (mountains or sea) и содержит неправильные фразы ('this year', 'I come swimming'). Сформулируйте чёткое мнение в первой фразе (I prefer the sea/mountains) и добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины. Избегайте расплывчатых формулировок и корректируйте грамматику: 'I prefer the sea because I like swimming and it helps me relax.'

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For instance, swimming in the sea and listening to the waves helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yas I every times lookout the vendor as a sunrise and traveling by bus because I think it's so interesting and a lot of beautiful views you can see.

✓ Yes, I always look out at vendors and the sunrise when travelling by bus because I think it's really interesting and there are a lot of beautiful views to see.

Student used incorrect pronouns and forms: 'Yas' -> 'Yes'; 'every times' -> 'always' (adverb); 'lookout' -> 'look out' (phrasal verb); 'the vendor as a sunrise' is unclear and incorrect pronoun/reference—changed to 'vendors and the sunrise'; 'traveling' -> 'travelling' (British spelling consistent with 'travelling by bus' but either is acceptable); sentence had awkward structure and missing 'there are' for existential clause, corrected to 'there are a lot of beautiful views to see'. Suggestions: use 'always' for habitual actions, separate phrasal verbs into two words, ensure pronouns refer clearly to correct nouns, and include 'there are' when indicating existence of multiple items.

× Sure, I always take photos of scenery outside the car window because I really find it really beautiful. Moreover, I like Do it and sunrise moments.

✓ Sure, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I find it really beautiful. Moreover, I like doing it and capturing sunrise moments.

Errors: duplicate 'really' is redundant; 'scenery' generally requires a determiner here -> 'the scenery'; 'I like Do it' is incorrect capitalization and form—should be 'I like doing it' (gerund after 'like'); 'sunrise moments' clarified with 'capturing sunrise moments' to sound natural. Suggestions: avoid redundant adverbs, use 'the' with specific scenery, use gerund after 'like' for activities, and use verbs like 'capture' to describe taking photos.

× Honestly, I prefer this year because I come swimming and I really like this activity. I feel really relaxing at this moment.

✓ Honestly, I prefer the sea because I go swimming there and I really enjoy that activity. I feel really relaxed at those times.

Original sentence had multiple issues: 'I prefer this year' is nonsensical in context of 'mountains or the sea' — likely intended 'I prefer the sea' (incorrect referent). 'I come swimming' is wrong verb choice and tense; use 'I go swimming' for habitual action. 'I really like this activity' -> natural 'I really enjoy that activity'. 'I feel really relaxing' is incorrect because 'relaxing' is an adjective that describes something that causes relaxation; to describe the person's state use 'relaxed'. Also 'at this moment' implies a single present moment; better 'at those times' or 'when I'm there' for habitual enjoyment. Suggestions: choose correct referents, use 'go swimming' for the action, use 'enjoy' for preferences, and use 'relaxed' to describe a person's state.