Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers in the present tense and make them concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar errors (e.g. tense, extra words). Focus on coherence: use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect reasons. Aim for 2–4 sentences, each clearly contributing new information.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me avoid motion sickness. For example, during long commutes I prefer watching the passing landscape rather than looking at my phone, since looking outside keeps me calmer and more comfortable.

제안: Use natural, standard expressions and correct verb forms. Begin with a direct response, then give a specific condition or example. Replace informal or awkward phrases ('reckon myself as', 'fancy') with simpler vocabulary ('consider myself', 'like'). Keep it concise and avoid hedging too much.

예시: Not usually — I don't consider myself someone who takes many photos from vehicles. However, if the view is truly spectacular, for example a dramatic mountain range or an unusual sunset, I will take a quick photo to remember it.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear preference or say both with balanced reasons. Use correct grammar and avoid repetitions. Provide specific reasons and examples, linked with connectors like 'because' or 'so'. Fix tense and awkward phrases (e.g. 'allow allow', 'when I was going to resolve'). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because I enjoy hiking and quiet trails. The sea is also relaxing, especially for swimming and watching sunsets, but mountains suit my active hobbies better.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when I was travelling by bus or car, especially when I was commuting for a really long period of time.

✓ Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car, especially when I am commuting for a long time.

The original mixes present simple ('do look') with past continuous ('was travelling', 'was commuting'), creating a tense inconsistency. Use present simple or present continuous to describe habitual actions. Change 'was travelling' to 'travel' and 'was commuting' to 'am commuting' (or 'commute') to match the habitual present meaning. Also simplify 'a really long period of time' to 'a long time' for naturalness.

× I found it really uncomfortable when staring at my at the phone when I was travelling as I can get really carsick.

✓ I found it really uncomfortable to stare at my phone when I travel because I can get really carsick.

The phrase 'when staring' is a dangling participle; it lacks a clear subject and clashes with tense. Use the infinitive 'to stare' or make the clause explicit ('when I stare'). Also remove the duplicated 'at' and change 'was travelling' to 'travel' to keep tense consistent. Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clearer causal connection.

× So I guess looking at the scenery is the best way to feel.

✓ So I guess looking at the scenery is the best way to feel better.

The original sentence ends with 'to feel', which is incomplete and vague. It requires an object or complement (e.g., 'better' or 'comfortable') to complete the meaning. Add a suitable adjective to convey the intended feeling.

× Well, I wouldn't reckon myself as a person who fancy taking a lot of photos.

✓ Well, I wouldn't describe myself as a person who fancies taking a lot of photos.

'Reckon' is informal and not typically used with 'myself' in this sense; 'describe' is more natural. Also the modal 'wouldn't' is acceptable but the verb agreement is wrong: 'who fancy' should be 'who fancies' because the relative clause refers to 'a person' (singular), so third-person singular '-s' is required.

× However, if the scenery is really fantastic then I think it might be worth capturing it.

✓ However, if the scenery is really fantastic, then I think it might be worth capturing.

The original ends with a redundant pronoun 'it' after 'capturing'; 'capturing' already takes the scenery as its object. Remove the final 'it'. Also add a comma after the conditional clause for clarity.

× Actually, I like both of them as they're both really important elements of Mother Nature and I do regard myself as a person who's really into nature and mountains do allow allow me to hike and the sea is really good when I was going to resolve.

✓ Actually, I like both of them because they're both important parts of nature. I regard myself as someone who is really into nature: the mountains allow me to hike, and the sea is great for relaxing.

This sentence has multiple issues: awkward phrase 'elements of Mother Nature' and repeated 'allow allow'; tense mismatch 'was going to resolve' is incorrect and unclear. Replace 'Mother Nature' with 'nature' for naturalness, change 'a person who's' to 'someone who is', correct agreement with 'mountains allow me', remove duplicate 'allow', and replace the unclear clause about the sea with 'the sea is great for relaxing' to convey the intended meaning. Also split into shorter sentences for clarity.