Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
수험생
Yes, I usually look out a window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus or car, for example. If where travel is really long and I don't know how I can spend time, I usually do it. It's very attractive and you can see a lot of spectacular and exciting signs.
시험관
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
수험생
Of course, in my opinion, it is the best idea if you travel by car. I usually travel in very beautiful and picturesque places, so it is very interesting and spectacular to look out the window and photo the most important moment.
시험관
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
수험생
In my opinion, I love both. For instance, when I go to the mountain, I see a lot of different interesting views. For example, I really like sunset in the mountains, but the sea is also very beautiful and I like to swim there and I don't think.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
점수: 72.0제안: Ответ по сути хорош, но есть ошибки в грамматике и словоупотреблении, а также некоторая неясность и повтор. Стоит использовать более естественные конструкции, исправить порядок слов и опустить лишние вводные слова. Также желательно связать предложения связующими словами и дать конкретный пример того, что вы видите.
예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. If the journey is long and I’m not sure how to spend the time, watching the scenery helps me relax. For example, on a recent trip I enjoyed seeing rolling hills and small villages passing by, which felt very peaceful.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
점수: 70.0제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит ошибки в словах (например, «photo» как глагол не совсем уместен) и тавтологию. Следует использовать более точную лексику (take photos, capture moments), связки для плавности и привести один конкретный пример того, что вы фотографируете.
예시: Yes, I usually take photos when I travel by car, because many routes are very scenic. I like to capture interesting details, such as a dramatic cliff or a colourful field, so I can remember the trip later.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
점수: 65.0제안: Ответ слишком короткий и немного неорганизованный: повторяются вводные («for instance», «for example») и есть незавершённое выражение («I don't think» неясно). Лучше дать чёткий выбор или сбалансированное сравнение, использовать связки и конкретные детали о том, что вы цените в каждом месте.
예시: I enjoy both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains slightly more. I love mountain sunsets and the fresh air, which make hiking very rewarding. However, I also enjoy the sea for swimming and relaxing on the beach, so both have their own appeal.
문법
× Yes, I usually look out a window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus or car, for example.
✓ Yes, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus or car, for example.
The definite article 'the' is needed before 'window' because we refer to a specific window contextually (the window of the vehicle). Use 'the window' rather than 'a window'. Suggestion: Use 'the window' when referring to a particular, known window such as the one on the bus or car.
× If where travel is really long and I don't know how I can spend time, I usually do it.
✓ If a journey is very long and I don't know how to spend the time, I usually look out the window.
The original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong choice of words ('where travel', 'how I can spend time', 'do it'). Correct structure: 'If a journey is very long' (singular noun 'journey'), 'I don't know how to spend the time' (infinitive after 'how to'), and clear main verb 'look out the window'. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases ('a journey') and proper infinitive structures ('how to spend the time').
× It's very attractive and you can see a lot of spectacular and exciting signs.
✓ It's very attractive and you can see a lot of spectacular and exciting sights.
The noun 'signs' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'sights' (things worth seeing). 'Signs' refers to notices; 'sights' means views. Maintain adjective order and choice. Suggestion: Use 'sights' for views or scenic things to see.
× ... it is very interesting and spectacular to look out the window and photo the most important moment.
✓ ... it is very interesting and spectacular to look out the window and photograph the most important moments.
'Photo' used as a verb is informal and nonstandard in this context; the correct verb is 'photograph'. Also plural 'moments' is more natural. Use base verb 'photograph' or present participle 'photograph' after 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'photograph' or 'take photos of' instead of 'photo'.
× In my opinion, I love both.
✓ In my opinion, I love both of them.
Add 'of them' after 'both' to complete the expression; 'both' needs an object when not clear from context. Suggestion: Use 'both of them' or 'both' followed by a noun ('both places').
× For instance, when I go to the mountain, I see a lot of different interesting views.
✓ For instance, when I go to the mountains, I see a lot of different interesting views.
Use plural 'the mountains' when speaking generally about mountain areas. Also 'go to the mountain' is unnatural unless a specific mountain is intended. Suggestion: Use 'the mountains' for general plural meaning, or 'a mountain' for a specific single mountain.
× For example, I really like sunset in the mountains, but the sea is also very beautiful and I like to swim there and I don't think.
✓ For example, I really like the sunset in the mountains, and the sea is also very beautiful; I like to swim there, and I don't know why.
Missing definite article 'the' before 'sunset' when referring to a specific phenomenon. The second clause 'and I don't think' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended 'I don't know why'. Added conjunction punctuation and clarified meaning. Suggestion: Use 'the sunset' for a specific sunset experience; complete incomplete thoughts ('I don't know why').
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