Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并在开头给出主题句；注意语法和词汇的正确使用（比如“fast-paced world”、“scenery”而不是“wheels”）；避免重复与冗长，用1-3句说明原因并给出具体细节或例子。可练习把句子简化并使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. I enjoy watching the changing scenery because I rarely have time to relax in my busy, fast-paced life, and seeing streets, trees and people helps me feel more connected to the city.

제안: 回答要更准确地表达原因，避免模糊词（如“umm”）和错误词汇（“wheels”应为“views”或“scenery”）；使用清晰的连接词（for example, because, so）并给出具体场景或拍照目的（留念、分享）。控制在最多5句内。

예시: Yes, I often take photos through the car window, especially on sunny days. Bright light makes the scenery look vivid, and I like to capture it to remember the mood or to share the view with my friends.

제안: 开头应直接回答偏好（I prefer the mountains），然后用一两句具体理由支持，比如童年经历和附近环境。注意语法（children → child, houses → house/more natural phrasing）和时态；使用连接词如“because”或“because of”。尽量避免重复同一信息。

예시: I prefer the mountains because I grew up hiking with my family and there was a mountain near my house. Those experiences made me appreciate fresh air, quiet trails and beautiful views.

× Yes, I do, it is because nowadays many people are living in the fast paces world.

✓ Yes, I do. It is because nowadays many people are living in a fast-paced world.

句子时态为现在时，但存在词语搭配与词形错误：将複合形容词 'fast-paced' 写错为两个词 'fast paces'。应使用现在进行时（are living）与正确的形容词形式 'fast-paced'。建议记住複合形容词用连字符，并检查名词/形容词形式。

× We have missed many wheels surrounding in our cities or society and that's why I enjoy looking out the window when I'm travelling the bus since I enjoy the wheel during the trip.

✓ We have missed many things happening around our cities and society, and that's why I enjoy looking out the window when I'm travelling by bus, since I enjoy seeing the sights during the trip.

原句存在句子结构混乱与词汇错误：'missed many wheels surrounding' 无意义，应改为 'missed many things happening around' 或 'missed many sights around'；'travelling the bus' 缺少介词，正确为 'travelling by bus'；'enjoy the wheel' 也不合适，改为 'enjoy seeing the sights'。建议理清主谓宾结构，使用正确固定搭配（travelling by bus, see the sights）。

× Yes, especially the sunny day, the wheels look so shiny and I liked it very much since I enjoy the sunshine and it is very umm.

✓ Yes, especially on sunny days, the views look so bright and I like them very much since I enjoy the sunshine and it makes me feel warm and energetic.

错误包括时间/介词搭配（应为 'on sunny days' 而不是 'the sunny day'）、名词选择（'wheels' 用错，应为 'views' 或 'scenery'）、时态不一致（'liked' 改为现在时 'like'，与陈述一般事实一致），以及句子未完成（'it is very umm' 不明确，应改为明确的形容词）。建议注意时间短语的介词，用词要贴切并保持时态一致。

× It makes me feel more energetic and feel warm so that I like to take the photos outside the window.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic and warm, so I like to take photos out of the window.

时态为一般现在时，但存在冗余和介词使用不当：'feel more energetic and feel warm' 重复 'feel' 可合并；'take the photos outside the window' 更自然为 'take photos out of the window' 或 'take photos from the window'。建议合并重复动词，注意常用固定搭配。

× I prefer the mountains rather than the sea since when I was a children my family already always took me to hike and there are also a mountain near my houses and that's why I prefer choosing the mountains rather than the sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because when I was a child my family often took me hiking, and there is also a mountain near my house, so I prefer the mountains to the sea.

句子存在多处错误：比较结构应为 'prefer A to B' 而不是 'prefer A rather than B'；'when I was a children' 应为 'when I was a child'（单复数错误）；'already always took me' 词序与副词搭配不当，应为 'often took me' 或 'always took me'；'a mountain near my houses' 名词与数不当，应为 'a mountain near my house'。建议学习 'prefer ... to ...' 的固定结构，注意单复数与副词位置。