Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and tense-consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct tense and pronoun use, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy watching changing landscapes and it helps me relax during long journeys.

제안: Clarify your idea and avoid vague phrases. Give a direct answer, then explain with a specific reason and one brief example. Remove unfinished sentences and unclear expressions like "I like the wheel" and "infinite."

예시: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially if the view is unusual or beautiful. For instance, I often photograph mountain ranges or sunsets to remember the moment and share it with friends.

제안: Use precise language and avoid informal filler phrases. Start with a clear preference, then give two concise, specific reasons connected by a linking word (for example, because/so). Keep it natural but more formal than casual speech.

예시: I prefer the sea because its wide views and rhythmic waves help me feel calm. For example, sitting by the shore reduces my stress and refreshes my mind after a busy week.

× Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, it doesn't matter.

✓ Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car; it doesn't matter.

This sentence contains a run-on comma splice linking two independent clauses with a comma. Use a semicolon, conjunction, or split into two sentences. The verb tenses (present simple) are correct for habitual actions.

× I'm really like, uh, to be comfortable when I was traveling.

✓ I really like to be comfortable when I travel.

The original mixes 'I'm really like' (incorrect) and shifts to past tense 'was traveling' though context is habitual. Replace with present simple 'I really like' and 'when I travel'. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal answer.

× Umm, so I used to sit on the window side.

✓ So I usually sit on the window side.

'Used to' implies a past habit no longer true; the question asks about usual behavior, so use present habitual 'usually sit'. This fixes tense mismatch.

× Actually it depends on the time and place, but usually I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like the wheel and I like to be that moment in like infinite.

✓ Actually, it depends on the time and place, but usually I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like the view and I like to keep that moment forever.

Several issues: 'the wheel' is incorrect; likely 'view' is intended. 'Like to be that moment in like infinite' is ungrammatical and mixes ideas — replace with 'keep that moment forever'. Present tense 'depends' and 'take' are correct. Added comma after 'Actually'.

× So taking photos is.

✓ So I take photos to capture it.

Fragment 'So taking photos is.' has no clear predicate or object. Replace with a complete sentence explaining purpose: 'I take photos to capture it.' This corrects sentence structure.

× Of course I prefer the sea because I mean the view is much more passionate and more vibe in there.

✓ Of course I prefer the sea because the view is much more inspiring and has a better vibe.

'Passionate' and 'more vibe' are incorrect collocations. Use 'inspiring' or 'more beautiful' for views and 'better vibe' for atmosphere. Removed filler 'I mean' for clarity.

× Like when I look into the sea I feel so calm and chill and actually it helps my mental health to refresh.

✓ When I look at the sea, I feel calm and relaxed, and it actually helps refresh my mental health.

Use 'look at the sea' rather than 'look into the sea'. 'Chill' is informal; 'relaxed' is more appropriate. 'Helps my mental health to refresh' is unidiomatic — use 'helps refresh my mental health' or 'helps me feel refreshed'. Adjusted comma placement for clarity.