Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer direct, coherent and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so, or when) to connect ideas. Keep it under 4–5 sentences and use correct grammar (articles and verb forms).

예시: Yes, I often look out of the car window when I travel. I enjoy watching the changing landscapes because they help me relax and spark my imagination. For example, I like imagining how people live in the houses we pass, and sometimes I notice small activities like children playing in a park.

제안: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Remove contradictions and filler words and correct simple grammar (singular/plural, tense, and pronouns).

예시: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery from the car. I usually do this to save a nice view or to share it on social media. For example, yesterday I photographed a beautiful sunset and posted it on Snapchat to show my friends how lovely the sky looked.

제안: Provide a clear preference sentence, then give specific, relevant reasons using linking words such as because or so. Avoid repetition and colloquial fragments; use correct adjectives and nouns (snow, snowy). Keep to 2–4 sentences with concrete details.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I love snowy landscapes. When mountains are covered in snow, they look peaceful and beautiful, and I enjoy activities like hiking or skiing there. The clean air and quiet atmosphere make mountain trips very relaxing for me.

× I really do look at window at the scenery when travelling by car.

✓ I really do look out the window at the scenery when travelling by car.

The correct preposition for viewing scenery through a vehicle window is 'out' and the noun phrase requires the definite article 'the' before 'window'. Use 'look out the window' or 'look out of the window'; also include 'the' to specify the window. Suggestion: Say 'I really do look out the window at the scenery when travelling by car.'

× Are there members because I love to say like, what's the after World is doing like sometime I do like the some activity, fun activity, like, uh, by by just imagining the like car is doing.

✓ I'm not sure what you mean, but I often imagine what's happening in the world; sometimes I imagine fun activities, like imagining what the people in other cars are doing.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun use and ungrammatical structure. 'Are there members' is not appropriate; pronouns and references are unclear. The correction replaces unclear pronouns with a clear subject 'I' and restructures the sentence into coherent clauses. Suggestion: Keep a clear subject for each clause and avoid redundant filler words like 'like' and repeated words.

× Yeah, sometime I do, sometime I don't like, uh, sometime I take photos because of my Snapchat streak.

✓ Yeah, sometimes I do and sometimes I don't; sometimes I take photos because of my Snapchat streak.

Use the plural adverb 'sometimes' (not 'sometime') when referring to repeated occasions. Also coordinate clauses with 'and' or punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for repeated actions and separate clauses with commas or conjunctions.

× For example, yesterday I took a picture of a beautiful sunset because I hate I want to post to my Snapchat and people can see like it's so beautiful.

✓ For example, yesterday I took a picture of a beautiful sunset because I wanted to post it to my Snapchat so people could see how beautiful it was.

The sentence mixes present tense 'hate I want' with past 'yesterday I took'. Use past tense for the reason: 'wanted' and 'could see' match 'took'. Also 'post to my Snapchat' needs an object 'it'. Replace 'like' fillers and use 'how' to introduce description. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent and include direct object pronouns where needed.

× I think I prefer the mountains because I love the snows.

✓ I think I prefer the mountains because I love snow.

'Snow' is an uncountable noun and should not take the plural form 'snows' in this context. Use the uncountable form 'snow'. Suggestion: Use singular/uncountable form for weather nouns like 'snow', 'rain', 'wind'.

× Like whenever it's winter time and mountain is covered with the snow, snow is like eternal right?

✓ Whenever it's winter and the mountains are covered with snow, the landscape looks so beautiful, doesn't it?

Use 'the' before 'mountains' when speaking generally about specific mountains in context: 'the mountains'. 'Winter time' is better as 'winter'. 'Snow' is uncountable so omit 'the' unless referring to specific snow. Also adjust verb agreement: 'mountains are covered'. Suggestion: Use 'the mountains are covered with snow' or 'covered in snow' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× It's so beautiful. Everything is covered in white. It's so look glad I can.

✓ It's so beautiful. Everything is covered in white. I feel so happy when I see it.

The final clause 'It's so look glad I can' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear subject and verb expressing the intended emotion: 'I feel so happy.' Suggestion: Use simple, complete sentences with subject-verb-object structure and avoid literal translations that break syntax.