Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Correct verb forms (e.g., "when I travel"), articles, and word order. Avoid redundant phrases like "when you are traveling by bus or car" repeated. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") once to connect reason.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and small villages pass by, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

제안: Make your answer clearer and fix grammar and vocabulary errors. Give one reason with a short explanation and a correct example. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., "the car in the heavy is always keep fast") with precise language such as "cars often move fast in heavy traffic." Keep to two–three sentences max and use a linking word like "because" or "so".

예시: No, I don't take photos from a moving car because it can be dangerous. For instance, cars often drive quickly and taking photos can distract the driver or cause you to drop your phone.

제안: Answer directly and use correct nouns and plural forms. Give one or two specific reasons with clear examples and linkers. Correct pronunciation-related spellings (e.g., "seafood," "shrimp") and grammar ("when I visit the sea"). Keep it natural and concise.

예시: I prefer the sea because I love seafood and coastal scenery. For example, when I visit the coast I enjoy eating fresh oysters and shrimp while walking along the beach.

× Absolutely, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I traveling by bus or car because it is really relaxing.

✓ Absolutely, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because it is really relaxing.

The verb after 'when' should be in the simple present 'travel' to match the habitual action 'usually'. 'I traveling' is incorrect form. Use base form for present tense with subject. Suggestion: use 'I travel' for habitual actions.

× You know when you are traveling by bus or car it is boring to waiting so sitting at the on the site.

✓ You know, when you are traveling by bus or car, it is boring to sit there, so you just sit and look out the window.

This sentence has multiple structure errors: 'to waiting' should be 'to wait' or 'boring to sit' but more natural is 'boring to sit there'; 'sitting at the on the site' is ungrammatical. Suggest breaking into clearer clauses and using correct verb forms and word order. Keep commas after introductory clauses.

× Actually, I must admit that I never take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is too dangerous.

✓ Actually, I must admit that I never take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's too dangerous.

Grammar is acceptable; minor suggestion: use contraction 'it's' for natural speech. No structural modal error; sentence kept same meaning. (Included because 'must' is a correct modal here.)

× For example, the car in the heavy is always keep fast.

✓ For example, cars in heavy traffic always keep moving quickly.

Original word order and choice are incorrect: 'the car in the heavy' and 'keep fast' are ungrammatical. Use plural 'cars' and phrase 'in heavy traffic' and verb phrase 'keep moving quickly' for clearer meaning. Maintain present simple for habitual observation.

× So if you are, take photos.

✓ So you shouldn't take photos while the car is moving.

Original fragment 'So if you are, take photos.' is incomplete and unclear. Provide a full clause explaining the consequence and use negative advice structure 'shouldn't' for safety. Keep tense consistent with present general advice.

× OK, I prefer visiting the sea because the dishes, seafoods and the beautiful coastal sightseeing.

✓ OK, I prefer visiting the seaside because of the food, seafood, and the beautiful coastal scenery.

'Prefer' can take a gerund, so 'visiting' is acceptable. Main issues: pluralization and word choice: 'seafoods' incorrect — use 'seafood' (uncountable); 'dishes' vague — use 'food' or 'local dishes'; 'coastal sightseeing' is awkward — use 'coastal scenery'. Also add 'because of' to link reasons.

× For example, when I visiting the sea, I can enjoy the oh the juicy oysters and the fresh shimples, which is my favorite.

✓ For example, when I visit the seaside, I can enjoy the juicy oysters and the fresh shrimp, which are my favorites.

After 'when' use simple present 'visit' not 'visiting' for a time clause. 'Shimples' is a misspelling of 'shrimp' and is plural; use 'are my favorites' to match plural nouns 'oysters and shrimp'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural forms.