Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence in present tense, avoid repetition, correct verb tense and article use, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to add a detail (for example, “and sometimes”).

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I often take photographs of interesting views, and sometimes I post the best ones on my social media to share with friends.

제안: Use correct tense and shorten repetitive phrases. Begin with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason using a linking word (because/so), and finish with a concise example or result. Avoid repeating “I like” and similar phrases.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery when I travel by car because I enjoy discovering new places. I take pictures to keep memories, and I usually share the best shots with family and close friends.

제안: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement), and make the answer slightly more specific. Start with a clear preference, briefly acknowledge the other option, then give a specific reason and example using a linking word like “because” or “for example.”

예시: I prefer the mountains, although the sea is beautiful too. I like mountains because in summer they offer fresh, cool air and great hiking trails, so I often go hiking there with friends.

× Yes, I always look at at the window when I was I am traveling.

✓ Yes, I always look out of the window when I am traveling.

The original mixes past and present ('was I am traveling') and uses incorrect preposition 'at at'. Use present continuous 'am traveling' to match 'always' habit in general contexts this speaker prefers present continuous for ongoing action. Also use 'look out of' or 'look out the window' and avoid duplicate 'at'. Suggestion: decide present ('I always look out of the window when I am traveling') or simple present ('I always look out of the window when I travel').

× I always take some photographs and posted the best one on my social media account.

✓ I always take some photographs and post the best ones on my social media account.

Sentence incorrectly mixes simple present 'always take' with past tense 'posted'. For habitual actions use simple present for both verbs. Also 'the best one' should be plural 'the best ones' to match 'some photographs'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and number: 'I always take some photographs and post the best ones on my social media account.'

× Sometime I share these photographs with my friend.

✓ Sometimes I share these photographs with my friends.

Use plural 'Sometimes' for frequency and plural 'friends' to match 'photographs' and typical usage. Also original missing plural 'friends' and needed 'Sometimes' with -s. Suggestion: use 'Sometimes I share these photographs with my friends.'

× Yes, I like to take photographs of scenery when I was traveling by car and I like to explore new things and I keep taking photographs for my memory and the best one I always share with my friends and family members.

✓ Yes, I like to take photographs of the scenery when I travel by car. I like to explore new things, and I keep taking photographs for my memories, and I always share the best ones with my friends and family members.

Original mixes past 'was traveling' with present 'like' and uses incorrect article 'scenery' without 'the'. For habitual preferences use simple present: 'when I travel'. 'Scenery' often takes 'the' when referring to what you see in a place. Use plural 'memories' and 'best ones' to match 'photographs'. Break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences and use commas and conjunctions correctly. Suggestion: use consistent tense (simple present) and correct articles and plurals.

× Well, both has their own beauty and their importance, but I mostly prefer the mountains because in the summer season it is very beneficial to get some fresh air and do hiking with friends.

✓ Well, both have their own beauty and importance, but I mostly prefer the mountains because in the summer it is very beneficial to get some fresh air and go hiking with friends.

Subject 'both' is plural, so verb should be 'have' not 'has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Their importance' is fine but 'and importance' is cleaner. 'In the summer season' is wordy; 'in the summer' is natural. Use 'go hiking' rather than 'do hiking'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects use plural verbs and prefer natural collocations like 'go hiking'.