Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体自然且直接，但存在重复（多次提到“sit by the window”或“look out of the window”）且句子可更简洁多样。建议在主题句后用一两句具体细节并用连接词衔接，避免冗余，同时丰富词汇，如用observe/scan/watch替代重复动词，并具体描述一两个印象深刻的景物或感受。

예시: Yes, I usually choose a window seat when I travel by bus or train because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, I often notice golden fields and winding rivers, and I find it relaxing to watch the changing light on the mountains as we go by.

제안: 回答直接但有语法和表达不准确（如“sceneries”应为“scenery”，“what I say”不合适），且句式单一。建议改用更自然的表达，解释拍照的具体原因并给出例子，使用连接词如“because”或“so”使逻辑更清晰。

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window when I see something striking, because it helps me remember the moment. For instance, I photographed a dramatic sunset over a lake last summer, and the picture still reminds me of the colours and atmosphere.

제안: 回答清晰且有个人偏好，但句子之间缺少连接词，且有一处标点或连贯问题（缺少连词或句号）。建议用简洁的主题句说明偏好，然后用连接词（e.g. because, whereas, in contrast）补充时间和原因，并给出一两个具体原因或活动。

예시: I enjoy both the mountains and the sea at different times of year: I prefer mountains in autumn and winter because I like hiking and the crisp air, whereas in spring and summer I go to the coast to relax on the beach and swim.

× I especially like to sit by the window when I travel by bus or by train.

✓ I especially like sitting by the window when I travel by bus or train.

句中“like to sit”不是错误，但与后文“when I travel”连用时，用动名词（sitting）更常见且更自然。建议用“like sitting”以提高口语连贯性和自然度。注意去掉“by train”前的多余“by”。

× I sit by the window and always look out of the window to admire the passing landscapes such as the fields, rivers, mountains.

✓ I sit by the window and always look out the window to admire the passing landscapes such as fields, rivers, and mountains.

“look out of the window”和“look out the window”都可，但在口语中常用“look out the window”。此外，列举项之间应加逗号并在倒数第二项前加“and”。去掉“the”以使列举更通用。

× If I come across some interesting and impressive sceneries, I will take out my phone and snap a photo because it's always interesting and meaningful to make some kind of visual recall of what I say.

✓ If I come across some interesting and impressive scenes, I will take out my phone and snap a photo because it's always interesting and meaningful to have a visual record of what I see.

“scenery”通常为不可数名词，复数形式不应为“sceneries”；改为“scenes”或使用不可数“scenery”。“visual recall”用法不自然，意应为“visual record”（视觉记录）。此外“what I say”应为“what I see”。这些改动能使句子语义准确且自然。

× I do prefer both the mountains and the sea at different times in the year.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea at different times of the year.

加上助动词“do”用于强调是可以的，但在此句中多余且略显别扭，去掉“do”更自然。将“in the year”改为惯用表达“of the year”。

× I usually visit the mountains in autumn and winter I love to explore the mountains.

✓ I usually visit the mountains in autumn and winter. I love to explore them.

原句缺少句号或连接词，造成Run-on sentence（连写句）。需要在“winter”后加句号或连词。同时重复“the mountains”显得累赘，可用代词“them”替代以使句子更简洁自然。

× In spring and summer I travel to the sea.

✓ In spring and summer I go to the seaside.

短语“travel to the sea”语感不太自然，通常说“go to the seaside”或“go to the beach”。建议使用“go to the seaside”以符合常用表达。