Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use gerund after 'enjoy' or 'like', and correct adjective form) and remove filler sounds.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel because watching the passing scenery relaxes me. For example, on long trips I enjoy observing the countryside and small towns, which makes the journey feel shorter and more interesting.

제안: Give a direct answer and explain clearly with specific reasons. Avoid vague or contradictory statements. Use linking words (because, so) and correct phrasing (e.g. 'I travel to take photos' or 'I take photos because').

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I want to capture interesting landscapes and moments. For instance, I took several pictures of a mountain range last month, which I later used in a travel album.

제안: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and reduce repetition. Use linking words to list reasons (firstly, also, finally). Replace unclear phrases ('sun wedding') with correct terms like 'sunbathing'. Provide two or three specific supporting details.

예시: I prefer the sea. Firstly, I enjoy swimming and sunbathing on the beach; secondly, I often go with friends so we take many photos together; finally, I love eating fresh seafood at seaside restaurants.

× Yes, I often look at the window, at the scenery when I am traveling.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window at the scenery when I am traveling.

The original sentence misuses the preposition 'at' after 'look'. The correct collocation is 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and then 'at the scenery'. Use 'look out of the window at the scenery' to correctly indicate direction and focus. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window at' or 'look out the window at' to specify where you look and what you look at.

× It's uh, uh, feel relaxed and fresh for me and uh, time goes really well on.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and refreshed, and time passes quickly.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb agreement and uses incorrect verb forms. 'It's feel' is ungrammatical; use a clear subject ('It') with the verb 'makes' plus an object ('me') and an adjective ('relaxed'). Use 'refreshed' (past participle as adjective) rather than 'fresh'. Replace 'time goes really well on' with the idiomatic 'time passes quickly'. Suggestion: Rephrase to 'It makes me feel relaxed and refreshed, and time passes quickly.'

× I look out, uh, outside.

✓ I look outside.

The phrase 'look out outside' is redundant: 'look out' can mean 'be careful' or 'look outside' describes seeing external view. Use 'I look outside' for clarity. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Say 'I look outside.'

× Yes, why not? I love to take a photo because I am travelling only for photos videos so I I appreciate it.

✓ Yes, why not? I love taking photos because I travel partly for photos and videos, so I appreciate them.

Several issues: verb+ -ing is required after 'love' when expressing a general preference ('love taking photos'). 'Travelling only for photos videos' is unclear and lacks proper quantifier/connector. Use 'travel partly for photos and videos' or 'travel mainly to take photos and videos'. 'I I' is a repetition and 'it' should refer to plurals 'photos and videos', so use 'them'. Suggestion: Use 'love taking photos' and match pronouns to plural nouns ('them').

× I, I prefer sea because I love swimming and sun wedding on the beach.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love swimming and sunbathing on the beach.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'sea' when speaking generally about the sea. 'Sun wedding' is incorrect; the intended word is 'sunbathing'. Also remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: Say 'I prefer the sea' and 'sunbathing'.

× I also go with my friends and we take a lot of photos and also I love to eat, uh, fresh seafood on the sea.

✓ I also go with my friends and we take a lot of photos, and I love to eat fresh seafood by the sea.

'Eat ... on the sea' is incorrect; use 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside' to indicate location. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'also'. Combine clauses for smoother flow. Suggestion: Use 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside' to describe eating seafood near the ocean.